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Description He placed his feet to the brink of the building, making sure they didn’t go over, not even one millimetre.

One. Two. Three.

Straightening up, he surveyed the world before him, feeling an immense pressure building inside.

Four. Five. Six.

Cars tooted their horns below, as general chaos issued when there was congestion. Crouching, he made sure his body didn’t go forward. Moving his head a couple of centimetres, he peeped over the precipice of the mountainous building.

Seven. Eight. Nine.

Retracting slowly, as if he was a turtle, he slowly stood up again with precise accuracy. The wind howled and rain threatened to lash its fury, but there was still time. Just.

Ten. One. Two.

5pm. No, it wasn’t that. 4pm 59 minutes 42 seconds.

Three. Four. Five.

It had to be at the right time. He had sought the place with stealth, but didn’t congratulate himself in his find. There was time for that later.

Six. Seven. Eight.

Later.

Nine. Ten. One.

He breathed in deep.

Two. Three. Four.

Raised his arms.

Five. Six. Seven.

And flew.

Eight. Nine. Ten.

I am Revolution.
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3wyl In reply to ??? [2018-07-09 23:09:03 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

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WavAngel In reply to 3wyl [2018-07-10 03:19:38 +0000 UTC]

 

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tanya3286 [2012-08-28 07:23:12 +0000 UTC]

...You made me sit on the edge of my bed.

I was totally expecting that he would jump but somehow also expecting a twist. Its really well constructed. It made me hold my breath and read, and that does not happen often. All that counting!

But what did you want to say with the last line?

It kind of brought a silly image to my head... flying and revolution; I started thinking about X men.

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3wyl In reply to tanya3286 [2012-09-18 12:27:25 +0000 UTC]

Really?

That's pretty cool! Thanks a lot there!

I... cannot remember. This is an extremely old piece for me. xD

Oh, that would be amazing! I wouldn't mind that as an ending for sure.

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tanya3286 In reply to 3wyl [2012-09-19 07:10:52 +0000 UTC]

lol, with the X men?

That would be pretty neat huh.

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3wyl In reply to tanya3286 [2012-09-19 19:14:43 +0000 UTC]

Exactly!

It'd be pretty cool.

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hefeigal [2012-06-22 00:52:16 +0000 UTC]

Wonderful.
Your writing is so riveting, and the details are enough to make me understand, yet not enough to make me want more! It's amazing!

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3wyl In reply to hefeigal [2012-06-24 15:10:17 +0000 UTC]

I have to admit that this is quite an old piece and I feel as if I have changed since then... though that's difficult to measure as I haven't written much of anything lately.

Thank you so much, though!

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hefeigal In reply to 3wyl [2012-06-24 17:40:57 +0000 UTC]

Well, it's a wonderful piece nevertheless!

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3wyl In reply to hefeigal [2012-06-24 19:11:44 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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Astrikos [2012-05-09 01:20:33 +0000 UTC]

That is perfectly random, perfectly amazing. I love the structure. Very thoughful. I really like your use of numbers and itallics.

Powerful piece. Interesting ideas there!

=I'm gonna feature you on my profile for a month, hence all these comments!

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3wyl In reply to Astrikos [2012-05-09 19:28:43 +0000 UTC]

Interesting way of describing it.

Thank you.

Aww, you don't have to do that!

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Astrikos In reply to 3wyl [2012-05-09 21:07:50 +0000 UTC]

I always interpret everything in an interesting way.

My pleasure!

I do!!~ You deserve it!

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3wyl In reply to Astrikos [2012-05-10 15:13:20 +0000 UTC]

Why not, right?

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Astrikos In reply to 3wyl [2012-05-10 20:51:28 +0000 UTC]

Indeed!

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hefeigal [2012-04-03 21:22:42 +0000 UTC]

This is a great piece!

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3wyl In reply to hefeigal [2012-04-05 13:44:36 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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siriakuu [2011-03-30 01:32:45 +0000 UTC]

I really like this peice. Well done.

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3wyl In reply to siriakuu [2011-03-30 19:49:56 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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siriakuu In reply to 3wyl [2011-03-30 23:36:52 +0000 UTC]

Anytime!

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siriakuu [2011-03-30 01:32:41 +0000 UTC]

I really like this peice. Well done.

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CheekyStoat [2010-12-16 21:43:36 +0000 UTC]

It makes me think a little about someone with OCD. Very neat.

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3wyl In reply to CheekyStoat [2010-12-17 22:41:21 +0000 UTC]

Ah... That's quite interesting.

I have actually written a piece to do with OCD, which you may find interesting: [link]

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CheekyStoat In reply to 3wyl [2010-12-18 05:23:32 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for showing that, I really enjoyed it.

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3wyl In reply to CheekyStoat [2010-12-18 11:37:36 +0000 UTC]



Will reply to your comment soon!

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AizenRain [2010-11-27 22:57:05 +0000 UTC]

Its an amazing piece.
Did you kill the guy that jumped off the building? (just asking)

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3wyl In reply to AizenRain [2010-11-28 18:36:28 +0000 UTC]

Lol, that's up to you to decide.

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AizenRain In reply to 3wyl [2010-11-28 22:11:29 +0000 UTC]

*queeeeellll* The suspence!!

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3wyl In reply to AizenRain [2010-11-29 21:30:19 +0000 UTC]

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AizenRain In reply to 3wyl [2010-12-04 06:29:17 +0000 UTC]

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Zazzatron [2010-11-27 02:58:11 +0000 UTC]

VIVA LA REVOLUSION

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3wyl In reply to Zazzatron [2010-11-27 09:17:23 +0000 UTC]

I guess so.

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Zazzatron In reply to 3wyl [2010-11-27 09:20:53 +0000 UTC]

Lol sorry, I just had to say it, love the literature though.

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3wyl In reply to Zazzatron [2010-11-27 09:24:38 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

It's much appreciated.

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Zazzatron In reply to 3wyl [2010-11-27 09:28:32 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.
-hugs back-

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Cyndardragon [2010-11-02 03:03:22 +0000 UTC]

Wow, this piece of literature could be interpreted in so many unique and positive ways...it's awesome!

Little brainwaves like that are really good sometimes

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3wyl In reply to Cyndardragon [2010-11-02 22:23:25 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

Oh, definitely. You get one short burst of creativity, but then it dies.. which is a shame, but eh, at least you produce a piece out of it.

Sort of like giving birth.

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Cyndardragon In reply to 3wyl [2010-11-04 20:09:12 +0000 UTC]

Lol, yeah, like giving birth XD Or like a sugar too!

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3wyl In reply to Cyndardragon [2010-11-04 20:11:29 +0000 UTC]



Exactly!

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Cyndardragon In reply to 3wyl [2010-11-04 20:14:44 +0000 UTC]

lol XD

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Wayward-Lines [2010-09-04 03:25:13 +0000 UTC]

I love this. It leaves it the imagination open for interpretation. He could be a base jumper as well. Nicely done

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3wyl In reply to Wayward-Lines [2010-09-04 18:14:05 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!

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Wayward-Lines In reply to 3wyl [2010-09-04 18:38:00 +0000 UTC]

Your most welcome

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Greywin [2010-04-08 21:52:53 +0000 UTC]

lol this doesnt sound random...

it sounds as if he killed himself 0_o.

are you trying to say revolution is its own end?

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3wyl In reply to Greywin [2010-04-09 19:21:19 +0000 UTC]



Well... I guess that depends on you, really... How you interpret it and such.

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Greywin In reply to 3wyl [2010-04-09 19:55:31 +0000 UTC]

lol nvm

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ChaoticSkye [2009-10-30 22:16:34 +0000 UTC]

very good I like the way you leave it... almost on an upbeat note... despite where it was going.

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3wyl In reply to ChaoticSkye [2009-10-31 19:37:32 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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Kamal-Q [2009-08-29 11:55:31 +0000 UTC]

I like this best out of your writings that I've read. - but whats interesting is that your description of an event that takes time to plan out and execute (waiting for 5 o'clock exactly) as random - hmmmm....isn't it any thing but?

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3wyl In reply to Kamal-Q [2009-08-29 21:35:06 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

Perhaps, perhaps, it depends on your perception.

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