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Published: 2009-05-13 19:42:34 +0000 UTC; Views: 3234; Favourites: 62; Downloads: 37
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I just want to liedown. I just want to rest. So
leave meβ¦ itβs quiet.
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It's so short, yet so many emotions are packed into less than twenty words.
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short sweet and awesome...Really gets the point across...I love it
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Thank you! I have to say I do like the brevity of things.
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Haikus are fun to write and fun to read. I also need a good rest.
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Oh, definitely! I love them myself.. probably favourite form of poetry, I think, for me.
Aww...
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ahh, but Haikus are about nature, what you have here is called a senryu which is about human frailty. Keep writing and I'll keep watching and reading occasionally
Patrick
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I guess so. o.O
Oh?
That's interesting... I'm not sure I'm familiar with the exact forms. >.<
Thanks a lot.
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The forms are the same, just the topic is different, the Tanka is the oldest form of Oriental poetry, it has 5 lines, 5 syllables for the first and third lines, 7 syllables for the other 3 lines. They were originally used as coded messages between lovers in the 13 century for love note as well as wishes for special days like holidays. Keep writing as I enjoy yoiur wor :0
Patrick
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I see, said the blind man LOL Have a very Happy New Year 
Patrick
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hmm, very interesting. this is the most interesting haiku I've ever read, and fits thematically
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I don't think it's a proper haiku... it's more like a prose piece, if that makes sense?
Thanks a lot.
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Yeah, that's probably what's kinda unique about it 
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Life is like a dream - we all wake up in the end.
Beautiful. Simply beautiful.
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No problem. Love your work
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This one sounds like me sometimes.
Its an awsome piece!
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Thank you!
I guess quite a few can relate.
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This is beautiful in it's simplicity. I have major respect for people who can write Haiku well
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So short, and yet so strong.
(*resists "Body Building Elf comment*)
Sometimes, small things speak in great volumes, and this does to me. Probably because I never get enough sleep (on a litteral note), and people are always pestering me for something at work.
Thank you so much.
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Aww...
Indeed! I think so as well.
Noo... Thank you.
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I cannot help it, but there is something so peaceful in those words.
Beautiful!
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Ahh, I love Damien Rice. And I love the finality of this haiku. It's kind of heartbreaking.
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