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Published: 2010-08-24 19:01:05 +0000 UTC; Views: 2145; Favourites: 25; Downloads: 24
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it's curvingOver on its own accord
try to push it
back
but it's like
feeling sinewy muscles
bone
flapping flapping
fragile
crust shedding over this
husk of a carcass
already too far
gone
it protrudes awkwardly
like one's vacillating kiss
ingenuous, chaste, amidst an
untamed silence needing to
be fulfilled
all the while feeling the
deformity
like a man's lugubrious cry
when capitulated
or like an asphyxiated man trying
to gasp in the air he needs
to live
though it is
i r r e c o n c i l a b l e
where split divisions provide
obstruction
to this way, to our way
it hurts…
to pin this back
}and{to keep these wires
fluttering
}and{to make sure it is in shape
when
all it wants to do is
curve.
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Thank you very much!
That's sort of what I was getting at.
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I like the cacophonous words in this; they conveys a sense of chaos, of desperation, beautifully.
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Thank you very much! It is what I was trying to portray.
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Like some people in real life flailing away, creating havoc and never accomplishing much. I see you like EE Cummings' style a bit
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I get what you mean with that!
Thanks a lot.
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First off, what a great vocabulary there. A lexicon for a wise and knowledgeable tongue. Just lovely really.
The structure for me feels like tired enthusiasm, as if getting the broken wings to work has been an exhausting ordeal; so really the structure matches the emotion for me, or creates it, I'm not really sure which is creating what to whom - what a complex piece!
Is this about getting over hurdles throughout life?
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Aww, thank you so much! That's high praise!
Interesting... I can see what you mean there.
It could be.
It's up to you what it means there.
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You're very welcome!
I'm glad that made sense.
Aww man!
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hmmm. I am about to introduce myself with the introduction of a phrase I use a lot. "I get it but I don't get it".
I love the poem itself. The expressions, the feel when one gets while reading it but being who I am, I am unable to decipher the code or un veil the picture if I may say.
The title... well the brackets look like wings; that is all I make out of it. Glad to find you so soon (2nd week on DA lol).
Beautiful work which I hope to understand someday
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It is a bit ambiguous, I guess.
Thank you so much!
I could tell you it all, but it wouldn't be as much fun that way... and it's up to your own interpretation anyway.
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That is what a poem is about 
leave it to the reader!
And you are welcome
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I can agree with you that the poem is littered with metaphors. After reading the part about the husk of a carcass, it seemed kind of Edgar Allen Poe-ish. I won't pretend that I fully understood the concept of the poem but I guess what I took from it is that the person is trying to be normal but feels that what's inside is showing through the facade and it is eating away at them inside that they even have to try to be normal in the first place. And they see themselves as being out of place and that no matter how hard they may try they can never be or really pretend to be normal but still they try and all the while it hurts to push back everything they know they really are just to try to be another drone. But I could be wrong. Deep poem though, very deep.
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I usually suck at metaphors... and I don't think the ones I've used are particularly good, as such, but eh.
I've never read anything by Poe, but that's pretty cool.
It takes a bit of explanation to understand it all.
That's quite an interesting perspective!
No! There is nothing wrong with it... literature shouldn't have a right and wrong... well, there should be boundaries, I guess, but I always thought literature was fluid, and that's what I like about it.
I like your view of things, anyway, and.. yeah, I feel as if many can relate to it.
Thank you very much.
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I think they're just fine, vivid, but just fine.
Well, not saying right or wrong, can you tell me if I was close?
I think so as well.
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I get the gist of the poetry... but I'm not too sure...
is this about anorexia?
'all I want to do is curve' and the fact that the person
wants freedom from unwanted thoughts, like food,
fat etc.?
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Not quite.
Definitely freedom from something, though.
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Awww.
Maybe this person wants to be free from life,
if I interprete 'all it wants to do is curve'
as the person wanting to hide from the circle of life.
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Ah, yes! That is a lovely interpretation.
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get out of your fetal position!!! the back is meant to be an "s" shape, not a "c" shape!!! lol.
will power is the key to all things.
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No truer words have ever been said.
I think I've lost this battle, though.
Thanks a lot.
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i've lost plenty of battles
but like a crime scene, i return to do evil again!
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Lol, that's somewhat... hopeful, I guess. o.O
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don't mind me...i'm as much a mess as the next person lol
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*wonders why you're so sweet lol*
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Very much butterflies. Fluttering and the }{ looks like butterfly wings... A rarity, unique but degraded almost, an unhappy, hurt butterfly.
I recently read a book called 'Cage of Butterflies' great book. Children in it are referred to as 'butterflies'. They are slightly neglected and hurt. This reminds me of it.
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Interesting...
Oh right, that sounds quite cool, I must say.
Thanks a lot.
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Just like your poem.
Welcomz, always
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It makes me feel...like fighting. Both physically and mentally. Maybe I'm just primitive. But it feels like to me, it's a person, wanting to fly, but there's something hovering over them, holding them down. All it wants to do is curve away from the set path, but there's something in it's way, killing it.
I think this particular piece would speak to each individual in a different way. I think it's like a cryptic voice of your soul, I guess, making a strange sonata of ones past experiences. In that way, it's an amazingly brilliant piece.
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Ooh, interesting. o.O
Perhaps we are all primitive in some ways...
Thank you very much.
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At the end, it came together (for me), as a dying bird trying to stay in the air when all it wants to do is curve. That might be wrong, but that's what I got. It could, leading from that, be a tired soul in the same situation, but trying to fly to Heaven away from the Hell that is the modern world. It could, equally, be the poetic voice straining against a deformity/insecurity which holds it back from being free in some way.
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Interesting...
I really like that interpretation!
All quite profound, I must say.
Thank you so much.
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You're welcome! 
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I'll take that as a compliment.
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i love this imagery & postioning is brilliant
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Wow.
I read, I read I again, I commented.
This is how I felt.
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Thank you! I'll take that as a compliment.
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