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Evetheguineapig4 [2017-12-27 01:38:22 +0000 UTC]

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RATINGS (each score is out of  a total of 5)

VISION: 5/5
ORIGINALITY: 4/5
TECHNIQUE: 2/5
IMPACT: 4/5
DEVIOUSNESS: 3.75/5
OVERALL (rounded total of all areas- score is in percentage): 75%

This art piece could use a little more work, mostly is shapes of body. While the story of you comic seems to be interesting, the images tend to distract the reader from the story. The necks are a bit too long and the outlines of the characters are a bit thin. As for the head of the boy on the far left, its a little too squashed. I recommend using a reference when drawing humans, it helps a bunch . I also recommend that you add some shading and perspective to make your drawing a bit more eye catching

Final Thoughts:

I see a lot of potential for you to become a cartoonist some day! this comic is pretty good and the coloring isn't painful to the eyes like most other comics you find on this site these days. Its quite refreshing to see someone trying their best to create quality work! Keep it up

translation:

Dark force
boah! the edge of the forum is scary right?
Give me your hand Dragon! I show you how powerful the dark side of the music ... the power of the dark metal is !!! Explore your feelings ... you know that it is true
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nya-Natsuki [2005-09-13 08:46:21 +0000 UTC]

das ist sooo geil... schade, dass ich nie auf solche Ideen komme TT__TT

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Coconut-Jaguar [2005-09-09 12:46:10 +0000 UTC]

Diesen Comic kenne ich ja bereits,aber trotzdem:

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