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cadbanex [2016-01-20 18:12:37 +0000 UTC]
good job
when does the next chapter come?
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anyugioh [2014-09-23 17:03:50 +0000 UTC]
good fun elean Girls or boy
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Adresude In reply to anyugioh [2014-09-24 00:30:49 +0000 UTC]
Not sure if I understand, but Elena is a girl.
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GospodinP [2013-11-20 11:30:12 +0000 UTC]
I think the verb tenses flip back and forth a lot between past and present, and that can be a bit distracting.
There are some details of the party that left me going back to re-read. How did the maid have no hands? Was the blessing just the feeling of disorientation and euphoria?
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Adresude In reply to GospodinP [2013-11-20 19:59:53 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for the feedback, I'll try to keep an eye out for things like that and correct it in the future.
Also, I should have said "without the use of hands," rather than no hands, as her wrist shackles were threaded through the bottom of the plate. I'm not that dark or into mutilation! I think I'll edit it.
Aaand, the blessing is the sensation of hazy euphoria upon seeing what Sierra wants them to see, yes.
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TraceMem [2013-11-20 01:37:08 +0000 UTC]
Neat. I liked the description of the place; very interesting.
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Adresude In reply to TraceMem [2013-11-20 02:32:15 +0000 UTC]
Oh thanks Jacob. :3
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ilovelaysan [2013-11-11 13:33:05 +0000 UTC]
Yea! Silks!
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Adresude In reply to ilovelaysan [2013-11-11 14:59:24 +0000 UTC]
Fun fact- I actually looked up "Aerial Dance" after you mentioned it to me. (I had an idea of what it was, just needed to refresh it.) That's sort of where that idea came from.
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Adresude In reply to nknx2005 [2013-11-10 07:43:43 +0000 UTC]
Oh thanks. I think about these in my spare time, so I have it all planned out. I think it's going to be very cute.
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