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Published: 2010-08-14 04:28:21 +0000 UTC; Views: 693; Favourites: 8; Downloads: 2
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Description When demons betray you while sifting through clouds,
A highway above me 'mongst saintly white crowds,
Fear not my dark star, my ship's on her way,
Docking on mountains, the night sky my bay,
Such danger pursues you, but I'm close at hand,
While oft' I am silent, slow to reprimand,
Cogs turn, engines pour out that creamy thick steam,
Soft down through that darkscape: slate, starlit, serene,
Your hand on my waistcoat, we drift o'er the world,
My hair sweeping past you in chocolate brown curls,
When did I esteem you, first appraise your worth?
I ask myself, lips sealed, hov'ring o'er the Earth,
And try to imagine that day in my mind,
But you turn me slowly, arms wrapping behind,
You hold me and whisper, "the past is the past",
And this is the present, this moment will last,
I dismiss my appeal to your disregard,
Hist'ry my mistress, making this step hard,
Nodding, my head now pressed close to your chest,
You lean your brave lips down to meet with my crest,
That beauteous splendor, such romance divine,
Please last me this moment... no, I've lost it to time.
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Comments: 15

soaringsalad [2011-10-11 04:40:47 +0000 UTC]

I love how much story you were able to convey in such a short poem!! I guess we're luckier than the main character in this poem because we can relive this moment over and over again just by re-reading. I feel like this poem is a snapshot of a moment, but one that lives and moves and is able to engulf the senses. I really like how the feeling of the reader at the end of the poem is the same as the character in the poem (at least i felt that way >_>) The abrupt end makes me feel like I was in the middle of a dream or a memory and there is a certain longing to relive the fleeting few moments before the conclusion of the poem.

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ahhwalkinghazard In reply to soaringsalad [2011-10-21 04:15:35 +0000 UTC]

Funny that you say it was like a dream interrupted, because it was based off of such! ;D

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angelStained [2010-10-28 08:49:25 +0000 UTC]

the rhyme is simply amazing, it flows so incredibly well, and so do the ideas.

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ahhwalkinghazard In reply to angelStained [2010-10-28 09:12:03 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much!!

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angelStained In reply to ahhwalkinghazard [2010-10-28 10:42:55 +0000 UTC]

no problem!

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harliequin [2010-08-22 18:02:12 +0000 UTC]

I'm not ENTIRELY sure what "steampunk" is...but I still thought this was rather pretty

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ahhwalkinghazard In reply to harliequin [2010-08-22 19:29:36 +0000 UTC]

Steampunk is a genre of Victorian sci-fi where technology is imagined to exist in the 19th century by the means of steam power Thank you for the compliment ^_^

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harliequin In reply to ahhwalkinghazard [2010-08-22 20:43:17 +0000 UTC]

I sort of figured that, but didn't want to assume. And yeah, I see the steampunkiness of this hehe.

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ahhwalkinghazard In reply to harliequin [2010-08-22 21:20:45 +0000 UTC]

Yay!

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kallia-goldenwings [2010-08-15 05:56:59 +0000 UTC]

just amazing

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ahhwalkinghazard In reply to kallia-goldenwings [2010-08-15 06:02:40 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so so very much ! I'm glad you think so.

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rocky-loves-emily [2010-08-14 17:23:38 +0000 UTC]

Absolutely wonderful...creativity and originality so evident in every line. The emotion and imagery is conveyed effortlessly.

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ahhwalkinghazard In reply to rocky-loves-emily [2010-08-15 05:03:18 +0000 UTC]

Speechlessly happy! So glad you like it !

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juliannecrea [2010-08-14 14:52:26 +0000 UTC]

i like this a lot especially the beginning; it paints a lovely image in my head

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ahhwalkinghazard In reply to juliannecrea [2010-08-15 05:02:55 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so very much ^_^ I'm so glad you enjoy it!

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