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soaringsalad [2011-10-11 04:40:47 +0000 UTC]
I love how much story you were able to convey in such a short poem!! I guess we're luckier than the main character in this poem because we can relive this moment over and over again just by re-reading. I feel like this poem is a snapshot of a moment, but one that lives and moves and is able to engulf the senses. I really like how the feeling of the reader at the end of the poem is the same as the character in the poem (at least i felt that way >_>) The abrupt end makes me feel like I was in the middle of a dream or a memory and there is a certain longing to relive the fleeting few moments before the conclusion of the poem.
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ahhwalkinghazard In reply to soaringsalad [2011-10-21 04:15:35 +0000 UTC]
Funny that you say it was like a dream interrupted, because it was based off of such! ;D
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angelStained [2010-10-28 08:49:25 +0000 UTC]
the rhyme is simply amazing, it flows so incredibly well, and so do the ideas.
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harliequin In reply to ahhwalkinghazard [2010-08-22 20:43:17 +0000 UTC]
I sort of figured that, but didn't want to assume. And yeah, I see the steampunkiness of this hehe.
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