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Creamlistner11092 [2007-03-05 06:15:03 +0000 UTC]
I like! It flows well, step by step, very nice!
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Gnyce [2006-12-19 04:32:55 +0000 UTC]
'Ey, this is nice. You already know what I said about it.
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Amandadear In reply to Gnyce [2006-12-19 04:34:12 +0000 UTC]
yes, thank you
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cloverkrismayan [2006-12-07 08:52:57 +0000 UTC]
It is simple, yet it gives powerful message and imagery. Keep up on good work.
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originalnasadude [2006-11-04 06:36:17 +0000 UTC]
This one is really cool. But it seems suicidal in a way...but it could be about losing your virginity too.
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Amandadear In reply to originalnasadude [2006-11-04 06:37:11 +0000 UTC]
Hmmm....but I have neither issues.... dont know what thats about. lol
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m4nti [2006-11-03 01:20:25 +0000 UTC]
this poem is great. the irregularity and the one-word verses... really add a certain sense of depression/breakdown (lol) (in a good sense of course, coz feeling trapped is what you're trying to convey here).
i love it.
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Amandadear In reply to m4nti [2006-11-03 01:21:00 +0000 UTC]
THANK YOU!
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L0rre [2006-11-02 23:24:17 +0000 UTC]
The tempo, at least at which I read the poem, was very smooth. The one word thoughts gave a certain feeling of psychological distress that I enjoyed very much. Very well conveyed.
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