Quester1 [2011-09-16 18:58:31 +0000 UTC]
Sorry to be a complete prig about grammar, but you've got a confusion of your (possessive) and you're (2nd person contracted verbal form). You wanted "your".
Otherwise, this is a really interesting little excerpt. It's little bit "Dark side of the Moon"-y, but in a good way.
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