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Omnianimeman [2015-10-05 16:51:24 +0000 UTC]
Awesome game so much fun it a hard game but fun
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draxys22 [2015-01-05 14:12:35 +0000 UTC]
im not a fan of MLP but i have to admit that looks cool
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PrimeTF [2014-03-05 15:46:34 +0000 UTC]
It was allllllllllllll because of Monsoon...
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Morgan-the-Rabbit [2014-01-12 22:17:49 +0000 UTC]
Ok, Twilight and the rest of the characters that she mentions are actual MLP characters, right? (sorry, I don't know much about it )
This is really great! You have a good way of describing the scene.
If I may, I have one suggestion. At the start, there is a prologue. Do you think that with these, you would be able to try and blend them into the actual bulk of the story more rather then having a separate prologue? It is almost reading the back of a book as it is, which is still fine. But maybe it could be posted as a separate entry so when you click to read chapter 1, the story kicks right off from there.
this is only a minor bit of feedback though, the story it's self is very good! Just wish I knew more about the 'Pony Universe' XD
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avgnfan55 In reply to Morgan-the-Rabbit [2014-01-12 22:35:50 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much. And yes, they are real Characters.
And thank you for the advise. I've done it that way for a while, but I can see where your coming from.
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avgnfan55 In reply to Lordofthememes [2013-11-07 02:12:35 +0000 UTC]
Thank you. Part two has some Luna, and Part three will finally have some action in it.
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vevans0009 [2013-10-14 16:49:07 +0000 UTC]
"Don't fuck with the senator!!!"
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avgnfan55 In reply to vevans0009 [2013-10-15 01:22:35 +0000 UTC]
*football fans cheer*
how do you like the story?
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avgnfan55 In reply to vevans0009 [2013-10-16 01:39:25 +0000 UTC]
And it's only going to get better. I hope you get to read the next chapter when I upload it.
I need all the feed back I can.
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avgnfan55 In reply to vevans0009 [2013-10-16 12:38:54 +0000 UTC]
Luna is next. so look forward to that.
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