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BeanieTheCabbage — I am.
Published: 2010-06-18 00:14:18 +0000 UTC; Views: 172; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 2
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I'm the girl with the rain soaked bones,Through the cemetery, all alone.
I'm the girl with the grey tinged eye,
Ever slowly going blind.
I'm the girl who runs away,
And dances at the Macabray.
I'm the girl with the sharp-toothed smile,
Lovely, bestial crocodile.
I'm the girl with the red-stained sleeve,
Everyday, she quietly grieves.
I'm the girl with the shattered heart,
Every night, is a brand new start.
I'm the girl with the bloodied nails,
Full of stories and never ending tales.
I'm the girl with the loving soul;
Every smile takes its toll.
Comments: 17
*bestial *grieves *its (no apostrophe)
And those are the grand total of three spelling issues. But I am not laughing. Noooo. No indeed. I don't laugh, I just correct and move on.
I really like this one, the rhythm is fantastic!
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Your name is in my heart the golden clapper in a bell, and as I know no rest, Roxane, always the heart is shaken, and ever rings your name!
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It must have leave to stir...it has a cramp! It is bad for it to be kept still so long. My rapier prickles like a foot asleep!
-from the lips of Hercule Savinien de Cyrano de Bergerac
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all fixed! thank you!
xD thank you :3
wonderful! I've been playing with rhythm, looks like this is a good one to expand upon, then
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everything ryhmes amazingly and its like purrfect ...
... :3 jst thought u should knooooo xD
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This poem is gorgeous. Love the flow, the feel and the emotion this leaves me with. Dyslexia? HA! If you have dyslexia then....you're doing quite all right with it, I shoudl think.
"I'm the girl with the bloodied nails
Full of stories and never-ending tales."
I also love
"I am the girl who runs away,
and dances at the Macabray." 
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*hopeful, innocent anime eyes* do you really think so?
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Yes!
Some of the most beautiful pieces of liturature aren't focused on "beautiful" things that we can see
but how you express yourself on paper
but I'm sure you knew that already ^^
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O:
THAT was beautiful! POST IT UP D:<
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Oh my, really? .___.;
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Otay, I do it for you ^^
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and guess what?
It's dedicated to you too! ^^
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