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Bethuel09 — The Love With Thorns
Published: 2005-08-18 14:01:00 +0000 UTC; Views: 730; Favourites: 7; Downloads: 17
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Description I once held a red red rose,
whose beauty was far too great for poetry and prose.
Every morning I would awake to the sight of her majesty,
fragile and small, yet never lacking in potency.
For her hero’s would fall, taking a deadly wound.
The wise would go mad, writing nuisance of her grandeur.
Regardless happy I remained never giving it much thought,
Only knowing with certainty that she was the subject of my every thought.
Than one day when the sun shone with all his fervor;
I felt a pain, small but hurtful unbeknownst to me before.
Alas! A thorn my rose had grown.
I was sickly grieved so; she was my very own.  
I released her from my hold,
knowing that was what she wanted from old.
Turning my back on her, I walked away.
Vowing never to return to such a place.
Time passed and my rose I did miss so.
Breaking my vow I walked towards her like I would do so long ago.
Finding her alive in the cold and in the snow;
I was overjoyed to have such luck.
Ready to take her with me once more;
And give her nourishment she sorely needed so.
I stopped myself remembering the thorn she had indeed grown.
I shook my head she was no longer my own.
So much hurt and so much pain,
yet from her I walked away.
My heart did ache so;
and I vowed to never own another rose.
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Comments: 43

kasblue [2006-04-03 21:24:08 +0000 UTC]

oh my god!! thats me!! thats me saying all that!! u've such perfectly written down what i had felt!!! that is so touching! its amazing... i'm going to read it out to my friends at work.
"Than one day when the sun shone with all his fervor;
I felt a pain, small but hurtful unbeknownst to me before.
Alas! A thorn my rose had grown.
I was sickly grieved so; she was my very own.
I released her from my hold,
knowing that was what she wanted from old."
this is amazing! OH MY GOD the whole poem is amazing!!! i love it! *sniff*

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Bethuel09 In reply to kasblue [2006-04-04 14:20:49 +0000 UTC]

thnx XO I really wanted it to have that things and I wrote this one thinking about that part you wrote the begining and end I didnt like so much...and I actually tried to change it but to no avail...:shakesfist:

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kasblue In reply to Bethuel09 [2006-04-04 15:18:54 +0000 UTC]

i dunno... it feels good to me!!

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Bethuel09 In reply to kasblue [2006-04-05 00:42:28 +0000 UTC]

thank you once again

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axinjaxon [2005-11-08 22:36:53 +0000 UTC]

This is a really good poem....

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Bethuel09 In reply to axinjaxon [2005-11-09 12:04:23 +0000 UTC]

thank you sir and thank you for commenting

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blue-angel-s [2005-09-16 22:22:30 +0000 UTC]

wow! i luv it! great job! keep up the great work!

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Bethuel09 In reply to blue-angel-s [2005-09-16 22:30:51 +0000 UTC]

oh thanx a lot for commenting and looking at it for that matter

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zoeytalks [2005-09-16 12:27:02 +0000 UTC]

It's awesome... No other way to say it.. I love it!

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Bethuel09 In reply to zoeytalks [2005-09-16 12:33:51 +0000 UTC]

ooh thanx a lot

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Tororo [2005-08-21 19:55:20 +0000 UTC]

Ok that is a damn beautiful poem; it pulling at each and every romantic and heartbreaking string in my body, it gave me the chills. (Almost brought a tear to my eye). ^^

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Bethuel09 In reply to Tororo [2005-08-22 14:08:56 +0000 UTC]

hmygosh: r u serious? wow i have accomplished my purpouse!

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Tororo In reply to Bethuel09 [2005-08-22 20:50:23 +0000 UTC]

Yes I agree, well done.^^

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Bethuel09 In reply to Tororo [2005-08-23 13:34:10 +0000 UTC]

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BleedingRomantic [2005-08-20 00:11:23 +0000 UTC]

It's wonderful

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Bethuel09 In reply to BleedingRomantic [2005-08-20 11:30:14 +0000 UTC]

oh thank my dear boy... another attempt at tackling u lol

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BleedingRomantic In reply to Bethuel09 [2005-08-20 23:53:51 +0000 UTC]

You should be so lucky to tackle me

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Bethuel09 In reply to BleedingRomantic [2005-08-22 13:38:20 +0000 UTC]

I am

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April-Chan [2005-08-19 15:36:44 +0000 UTC]

*Squeeee* I loves it! Some of those lines are REALLY good! !!!!!!!!! This is great hun! I LOVE it!

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Bethuel09 In reply to April-Chan [2005-08-19 16:22:37 +0000 UTC]

aww than so much darling

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Gayahuaniel [2005-08-19 14:31:31 +0000 UTC]

WEll written.

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Bethuel09 In reply to Gayahuaniel [2005-08-19 14:40:31 +0000 UTC]

thnx I was scared I would forget of punctuation and such yet again....><

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Gayahuaniel In reply to Bethuel09 [2005-08-19 16:58:15 +0000 UTC]

It worked out pretty well in my opinion.

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Bethuel09 In reply to Gayahuaniel [2005-08-20 11:17:40 +0000 UTC]

oh well thnx a lot darling

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ShiShijin [2005-08-19 11:58:14 +0000 UTC]

oh that turned out well i like it

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Bethuel09 In reply to ShiShijin [2005-08-19 14:33:40 +0000 UTC]

oh thnx...^^

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ShiShijin In reply to Bethuel09 [2005-08-19 15:40:43 +0000 UTC]

but of course

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Bethuel09 In reply to ShiShijin [2005-08-20 11:36:04 +0000 UTC]

lol

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ShiShijin In reply to Bethuel09 [2005-08-20 11:39:29 +0000 UTC]

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Bethuel09 In reply to ShiShijin [2005-08-20 12:23:30 +0000 UTC]

lol

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ShiShijin In reply to Bethuel09 [2005-08-20 12:28:15 +0000 UTC]

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Bethuel09 In reply to ShiShijin [2005-08-22 13:18:36 +0000 UTC]

lol

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ShiShijin In reply to Bethuel09 [2005-08-22 15:32:45 +0000 UTC]

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Bethuel09 In reply to ShiShijin [2005-08-23 12:13:08 +0000 UTC]

lol

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ShiShijin In reply to Bethuel09 [2005-08-23 12:18:34 +0000 UTC]

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Bethuel09 In reply to ShiShijin [2005-09-05 15:00:38 +0000 UTC]

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ShiShijin In reply to Bethuel09 [2005-09-05 15:19:54 +0000 UTC]

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Bethuel09 In reply to ShiShijin [2005-09-08 01:20:36 +0000 UTC]

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ShiShijin In reply to Bethuel09 [2005-09-08 03:23:22 +0000 UTC]

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Bethuel09 In reply to ShiShijin [2005-09-16 12:36:52 +0000 UTC]

lol hehe

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ShiShijin In reply to Bethuel09 [2005-09-16 15:07:10 +0000 UTC]

damn we are just going to sell your arse to the highest bidder at this rate it keeps falling off

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Bethuel09 In reply to ShiShijin [2005-10-04 15:19:54 +0000 UTC]

hmygosh: your selling me arse?!!!

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ShiShijin In reply to Bethuel09 [2005-10-31 21:49:37 +0000 UTC]

aye why wouldn't i if ur laughing it off i think i could fetch a fair price for it

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