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kasblue [2006-04-03 21:24:08 +0000 UTC]
oh my god!! thats me!! thats me saying all that!! u've such perfectly written down what i had felt!!! that is so touching! its amazing... i'm going to read it out to my friends at work.
"Than one day when the sun shone with all his fervor;
I felt a pain, small but hurtful unbeknownst to me before.
Alas! A thorn my rose had grown.
I was sickly grieved so; she was my very own.
I released her from my hold,
knowing that was what she wanted from old."
this is amazing! OH MY GOD the whole poem is amazing!!! i love it! *sniff*
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Bethuel09 In reply to kasblue [2006-04-04 14:20:49 +0000 UTC]
thnx XO I really wanted it to have that things and I wrote this one thinking about that part you wrote the begining and end I didnt like so much...and I actually tried to change it but to no avail...:shakesfist:
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kasblue In reply to Bethuel09 [2006-04-04 15:18:54 +0000 UTC]
i dunno... it feels good to me!!
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axinjaxon [2005-11-08 22:36:53 +0000 UTC]
This is a really good poem....
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zoeytalks [2005-09-16 12:27:02 +0000 UTC]
It's awesome... No other way to say it.. I love it!
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Tororo [2005-08-21 19:55:20 +0000 UTC]
Ok that is a damn beautiful poem; it pulling at each and every romantic and heartbreaking string in my body, it gave me the chills. (Almost brought a tear to my eye). ^^
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Tororo In reply to Bethuel09 [2005-08-22 20:50:23 +0000 UTC]
Yes I agree, well done.^^
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Gayahuaniel [2005-08-19 14:31:31 +0000 UTC]
WEll written.
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Bethuel09 In reply to Gayahuaniel [2005-08-19 14:40:31 +0000 UTC]
thnx I was scared I would forget of punctuation and such yet again....><
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Gayahuaniel In reply to Bethuel09 [2005-08-19 16:58:15 +0000 UTC]
It worked out pretty well in my opinion.
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ShiShijin [2005-08-19 11:58:14 +0000 UTC]
oh that turned out well i like it
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ShiShijin In reply to Bethuel09 [2005-09-16 15:07:10 +0000 UTC]
damn we are just going to sell your arse to the highest bidder at this rate it keeps falling off
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