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BioNickD — Poachers (Ranyx story opening)

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Published: 2015-08-23 22:55:06 +0000 UTC; Views: 642; Favourites: 10; Downloads: 0
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Someone was stalking through the forest. His skin was green for the most part, except for his upper arms, hands, and a large band on his tail, which were grey. He had horns that protruded from the sides of his head and curved up toward the front of his long, but blunt face. Sharp fangs were visible even though his mouth was closed. His fingers and toes were tipped with talons. Fleshy spikes ran the length of his spine, and at the tip of his tail were two bright red-orange poison barbs. He was a Tarkan, and his name was Ranyx Dryton.

Armed with a crossbow, Ranyx walked through the forest on his toes, being careful not to make any noise. He had already shot two pheasants, which were now hanging on his back. But Ranyx was looking for something bigger to fill his cooler. He stopped and sniffed the air. His blue eyes narrowed and darted around, looking for any movement. Finally, he spotted a Chixa grazing in a clearing about fifty yards away. Ranyx slowly crept closer, and positioned himself behind some thick bushes some ten feet away from the Chixa. The Chixa looked up and sniffed, then went back to eating. Ranyx carefully loaded his crossbow and took aim. The Chixa looked around nervously. Ranyx held his breath. He was just about to pull the trigger when from out of nowhere an arrow whizzed straight into the Chixa's heart. Ranyx gasped and crouched down lower. As he peered through the leaves, two figures emerged from the forest. They were big, red, and scaly, with straight-back horns and long, pointed faces. Drazirians.

One went over to claim the Chixa. Ranyx looked over and was enraged when he saw what the other one was carrying. There was no mistaking the bright blue feathers of the Torrek, the Tarkan's most honored and sacred bird. And these dirty Drazirians were hunting it like common game. Ranyx was burning to burst through the bushes and attack, but managed to restrain himself. It wouldn't do any good now.

Ranyx waited for the Drazirians to leave, and waited another five minutes afterward just to be safe. He set off for home, still angry about what he had witnessed. There had been reports on the radio of Drazirians crossing the Drask Mountains into Tarka for the past few weeks, with more being sighted each time, but Ranyx never thought that they would come this far into Tarka, so close to his home. He stormed through the forest, no longer caring if he disturbed the peace. The images of the poachers continued the flash in his mind, making him angrier. When he arrived home, he threw open the door, stomped inside, and unceremoniously tossed the pheasants and his crossbow on the table. He headed for the stairs.

“Ranyx, what are you doing back so early?” Ranyx jumped. He hadn't noticed his mother, Luanna, a yellow Tarkan, in the kitchen making lunch.

“What's wrong?” she asked. Ranyx paced as he told her what happened.

“There were two Drazirians, right here in Huntington forest! They stole my chixa, but that's not the worst part.”

He stopped, and looked his mother straight in the eyes.

“They shot a Torrek, Mom.” She gasped. “I know,” Ranyx sighed, “And I couldn't do anything.” He turned and headed for the stairs again. Luanna said, “Uh, Ranyx?”

He turned back and mumbled, “What?”

“You forgot to close the door.”

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Comments: 6

AxlReigns [2019-02-17 17:54:44 +0000 UTC]

Surprised this has fallen under my radar until now. I think it's pretty cool that you're able to both write and illustrate your stories. I'm gonna keep reading on. 

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BioNickD In reply to AxlReigns [2019-02-17 18:05:40 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. Glad to finally see my story reaching more people.

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Gralegio [2015-08-24 12:34:36 +0000 UTC]

Good story!  The glimpse you've given us into this world is an interesting one, and left me wanting to see more.  Will Ranyx have more run ins with these poachers?  And will he be able to stop himself from confronting them then?  Good job! 

I really like the illustration too, you packed a whole lot of detail into it. 

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BioNickD In reply to Gralegio [2015-08-24 19:29:38 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! Don't worry, there's plenty more to come, and your questions will be answered.

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Ferroth [2015-08-24 06:06:29 +0000 UTC]

Very engaging! It sets up the action and conflict nice and quickly.

leaves me wondering what will happen next.

as for the illustration, it's very well done too. I really like the background! You've fashioned the forest very distinctively. I can look at the trees and imagine what they feel like and what it's like to be there.

The scene, of course, portrays good suspense.

i also thought it was cool how ranyx uses smell to track his prey.

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BioNickD In reply to Ferroth [2015-08-24 19:24:00 +0000 UTC]

Glad to know my story is effective! I picked up a few writing tips and tricks from reading Characters and Viewpoint by Orson Scott Card. One of the points he makes in the book is to start your story in the middle of some action to get your readers hooked, then fill in the backstory in little snippets as the story progresses, in places where it makes sense.

Thanks! I guess I can draw pretty good backgrounds when I actually try.

I thought it would be cool to have an advanced society that still retained some animal instincts and abillities. I even want it to be a mechanic in the game, where you can push a 'heightened senses' button, and it would muffle all the unimportant background details, and let you see and hear things a normal human could not.

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