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freyaintranslation [2019-06-17 17:39:05 +0000 UTC]
Congrats on the DD!
the broken map
of our histories
A wonderful and unique expression. Love it.
You're relying on the word "so" quite a bit throughout, SO - - I'm thinking it would be better not to repeat it in the fourth stanza. Perhaps:
so sudden you were
frantic ??
Just my thoughts. Your poem, your choice, of course. Excellent theme and write.
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hard-to-reach [2019-06-14 19:38:33 +0000 UTC]
Ayyyy I live in Ohio
It is pretty great
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LindArtz [2019-06-11 03:06:15 +0000 UTC]
Very nicely done!!
Congratulations on your much deserved DD!
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Genisay [2019-06-10 09:02:01 +0000 UTC]
I feel like this would make a great song in the vain of something like Smokey Mountain Range or Meet Me In Montana.
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ikazon [2019-05-29 23:32:57 +0000 UTC]
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ElementalEmily [2019-05-29 12:24:25 +0000 UTC]
I live in Ohio and I can tell you everything here is lush and green and fertile. Mostly flat with some gently sloping hills. It's mostly forests and farms. There are no tornadoes, floods, wildfires, monsoons, earthquakes, droughts or any kind of natural disasters. I truly believe this is the safest place on earth. Everyone I know who has moved away ends up moving back here again.
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brassteeth In reply to ElementalEmily [2019-05-29 20:19:55 +0000 UTC]
Thanks Emily. I love your beautiful description of your homeland. Thanks for the read.
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YouInventedMe [2019-05-26 02:16:22 +0000 UTC]
Great to see something from you.
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SouthSydney [2019-05-25 05:41:32 +0000 UTC]
So great to see a new piece from you...!
So wonderful to see your distinct style back on D/Art.
Wow!
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