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Published: 2004-02-25 01:27:04 +0000 UTC; Views: 123; Favourites: 4; Downloads: 26
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Description I saw you, winter
I, the little girl
As you cried your lacy tears
Helplessly watching the birds
Laughing
While they flew away from you

I watched you reach out
With loving tendrils, in spirals
Spinning round and round,
To caress
Blazing, fiery trees

I saw
They died, each one, in your arms
And you, silent in your innocence
Did not stop the persecution

I watched you wrap your wings
Compassionately
Around the new born's cheeks
And as it cried out in terror
I saw your clouds of rejection
Swirl gloomily overhead

I saw your forlorn look
As spring came a-strut
To push you out
Heroically
And in your weakened state
You allowed the abuse

I watched you leave
The player on the stage
Who's part is more than beautiful
But who cannot be loved
As a hero is loved

I saw you
And loved you
And sat I, the little girl
Waiting
As glorified seasons
Advertised themselves to my race
while you wait, wretched
To walk your hateful part
In this
the final act

I saw
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Comments: 15

kage-no-tenshi [2004-03-23 02:46:09 +0000 UTC]

wow... this is absolutely gorgeous... i could try doing some art for this, and i'll see how it turns out... if you don't mind, that is... but i've got some inspiration now... wonderful work, and thank you... i've been lacking much creativity for a while, i think you've given me the boost i needed to get back onto my feet. many thanks, fellow poet.

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ChaoticKaleidoscope In reply to kage-no-tenshi [2004-03-23 03:23:18 +0000 UTC]

wow, thank you, im flattered that it inspired you. by all means, run wild. I want to see how you interpret this. Tell me when you finish it!

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kage-no-tenshi In reply to ChaoticKaleidoscope [2004-03-23 03:46:45 +0000 UTC]

will do.. thanks for the opportunity!

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machesnaches [2004-03-07 13:12:13 +0000 UTC]

I like, and I'd wonder, could I get you to write a poem from the point of view of Persephone? Or about her? I think it'd come out beautifully from your pen (or keyboard).

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ChaoticKaleidoscope In reply to machesnaches [2004-03-07 13:13:44 +0000 UTC]

wow im flattered. I'd love to attempt it, but when would it take place? when hades carries her into hell?

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machesnaches In reply to ChaoticKaleidoscope [2004-03-07 13:14:52 +0000 UTC]

I think it's a great idea to be there. (And I'm glad you got the reference!)

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ChaoticKaleidoscope In reply to machesnaches [2004-03-07 13:16:45 +0000 UTC]

haha, I adore mythology. I'll look into it. Im very very flattered that you think I can pull that off! I can get it to you in about a week if you'd like.

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machesnaches In reply to ChaoticKaleidoscope [2004-03-07 13:32:20 +0000 UTC]

Ok.

Well, um... I have a tattoo of Loki on me. But that's a different set of stories all together.

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blackoberst [2004-03-05 10:40:43 +0000 UTC]

Man, whoa... Right now it's snowing outside, the window is open and my fingers are freezing on the keyboard... But I, too, love winter and I loved your poem I think I'll swing by the lake today and watch the ducks and seagulls fly around amongst the snowflakes... Maybe the lake will even freeze over and they'll keep just part of it warm with their bodies... They did it before... I wish I had a better camera, a proffesional one... Winter rocks, and so do you!

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ChaoticKaleidoscope In reply to blackoberst [2004-03-05 15:20:39 +0000 UTC]

wow! thank you so much! man, I'm so jealous. Where I am, schools get out if there's an inch of snow. WE never get anything here, but I still love the cold...God, I can just imagine how beautiful it must be, all the birds flying through the dancing snowflakes...I too wish I had a better camera, but compared to you, I've nothing ot take pictures of, lol! THank you so much for the comment, I'm very flattered.

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foolishheart [2004-02-25 02:39:26 +0000 UTC]

I must say, I think this one is Your best poem ever. I love love love it!

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ChaoticKaleidoscope In reply to foolishheart [2004-02-25 04:19:28 +0000 UTC]

wow, thank you...coming from you that mean so much, you have no idea.

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PLEASEletuslove [2004-02-25 01:30:15 +0000 UTC]

Never have I seen a more beautiful picture of winter painted in my mind

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ChaoticKaleidoscope In reply to PLEASEletuslove [2004-02-25 01:37:48 +0000 UTC]

thank you!

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PLEASEletuslove In reply to ChaoticKaleidoscope [2004-02-25 01:42:21 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome , you deserve it

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