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chase123 In reply to xPWRA [2010-07-06 02:47:23 +0000 UTC]
Thanks but the thing Is im not sure on weather to continue or give up on it.One pperson said that my writing bored them to death..It was said in a chatroom
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darkrosefairy77 [2009-07-07 05:33:22 +0000 UTC]
just a thought, try to avoid repetitive phrases such as "it appeared to be" or "she was also wearing." use commas, and go out of your way to describe in new ways instead of using the same phrases over and over. It helps alot with the flow
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Raxoon [2008-09-25 12:24:57 +0000 UTC]
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chase123 In reply to Raxoon [2008-09-25 22:12:59 +0000 UTC]
yea i had to litterlly do some major thinking to get you dressed right in this chapter
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