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Published: 2012-05-22 01:23:12 +0000 UTC; Views: 328; Favourites: 9; Downloads: 8
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If you be my starIll be your sky
You can hide underneath me and come out at night
When i turn jet black
And you show off your light
I live to make you shine
I live to make you shine
But you can sky rocket away
From me
And never come back if you find another galaxy
Far,from here
Where there's more room to fly
Just leave me your star dust to remember you by
Something random i drew :I
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Comments: 7
Okie dokie, so I'll get started with what I like about this picture first.
I like the pose of the character! The turned away position is something that I took awhile to get the hang of when I was starting out with digital art, so kudos to you for that. I also like the fluff, and those teeny tiny stars you added in the sky. They look so cute. For stars, anyway. x3 I also like the mood that the way you shaded gives; kinda sad and thoughtful.
Now onto the cons, things that I think you could improve on to make this picture even better. c:
While the overall pose is nice, I do think it should be more defined. As in, giving an indication of legs or something. I'm... not exactly sure how to explain that. It just seems that the bottom portion of cat is a bit like a lump instead of proportioned the way an actual cat would be. I'm probably not explaining this correctly. I'll move on now.
Secondly, the right ear is a bit awkward compared to the left ear. If you drew the ear facing downward more, it would look a lot more natural.
Now the shading is a bit of a problem. While it does create an effective mood, what with the darkness of it and all, it doesn't seem like it has a definite light source. Of course, I'm not exactly an expert in light source, but the lighting does look a bit wacked, even to me. I think there are more places where the light should hit. The shadowing on the tail also bothers me a bit. Maybe make the shading curve a bit more inward, if that makes sense.
When doing grass, I'd suggest avoiding that Photoshop grass tool as much as possible. Using that brush makes the picture look a bit dull. Try drawing your own grass. Trust me, the result is loads better.
I also feel like the shape of the cat head in the stars could be improved a bit more, maybe by adding little tiny stars around it, just to make it seem more like the face was actually formed by stars instead of just formed by a bunch of white lines. More stars in the sky would be nice, too. Just my opinion, though. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/r/r… " width="15" height="15" alt="
Anyway, keep working to improve and you'll get better in no time! :3
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Yay! Are you coming to school tomorrow then?
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yeah.I was at school today
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Huh, I didn't see you. I must have gotten there too late. D:
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