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CrashArtist — The Contortionist
Published: 2009-02-22 05:20:23 +0000 UTC; Views: 1074; Favourites: 9; Downloads: 11
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You used to call me your little contortionistbecause of all the ways that I would bend to your will
I learned to think of it as one of those terms of endearment
because it stung, but it was supposed to mean that you loved me
or something
I would spin round and round with my hands up in the air because it was the only way I could keep from falling off the pedestal you put me on
it was a long way down, and the only thing I would hurt was my heart
or my head
whichever of the two that seemed to be making those decision things
I told you about that once, the spinning to keep from falling
because I thought it was beautiful
I wanted to be your magic girl
like the one in all those movies who just had
"something about her"
and could take you to all those places you've never been to
and make you see everything differently
better
All you told me was that everyone falls
no matter how high they reach
I remember tripping and hitting my head against a desk later that day
it made me decide that I didn't want to be with you anymore
Comments: 27
"it was supposed to mean that you loved me
or something"
this poem is so meaningful
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Contortionist, another example of your inspiration of experience coupled with masterful phrasing and timing.
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It has everything it's supposed to have emotion. The power of it stuns me.
GREAT JOB
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Thank you, I'm glad you like it!
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D'awww 
you're getting on my good side all over the place
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Thanks
You are a great writer continue your good work
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Nicely done. 
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that is a good piece! i have no idea why you said it feels like its missing something. i like how this has elements that makes the reading thing (through the spinning and falling subject). i also like the way this opens with that first stanza.
i just found the first line of the second stanza a bit too long and i was gasping for breath at the end of it. but thats just a minor glitch that i contemplated even mentioning here. other than that, all good!
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corrections:
*elements that make the reader think
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I think I'm over thinking a bit
and you're another one who makes me smile
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"I would spin round and round with my hands up in the air because it was the only way I could keep from falling off the pedestal you put me on"
- genius! indeed stunning! love love lovesssss it!!
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I have to agree, I loves it.
The power! The emotion!
This was stunning!
Absolutely stunning... I really love it... Seriously, I really love it...
I have not read one thing by you that I did not love! What a thing to brag!
Gotta go make tea now...
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You make me smile
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