Comments: 11
Daiichi [2004-04-21 18:33:53 +0000 UTC]
The poem starts out with strong imagery as the pictures flow away with the wind, And then you make a good case for why..Re-emphasize the necessity of it mentioning how your life has been one of names and letters, picnics and rainy days..And you can't move on without forgetting them all or changing them somehow..the message is clear, and yet it's acceptable..Good work
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specifulme [2004-04-19 23:41:03 +0000 UTC]
hmm...time...can do wonders...and destroy thousands...
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tensai [2004-04-19 06:11:48 +0000 UTC]
your poems are always sooo sad... i hope i'd never have to do that to what little precious memories i have now...
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cudlpnk In reply to tensai [2004-04-19 20:38:39 +0000 UTC]
Aww I hope you don''t either. Thank you for the comment. I will try to write a happy one for ya
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kinho [2004-04-19 02:53:04 +0000 UTC]
jus wonderin, but is the 2nd line of the 2nd stanza supposed to be "Rainy days and picnics filled pages" instead of "Rainy days and picnics fill pages"? i dunno. "Tears leave wrinkles, imbedded upon smiles", excellent line, though isnt it embedded? hehe
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kinho [2004-04-19 02:48:30 +0000 UTC]
very nice poem, the best ive read from you so far i think, the 2nd stanza, however, really confused me, im gonna read t again to see if i can interpret it better. Still, i must say that this is very very good, keep it up
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