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This is part of the sketch of the commission for ~philosofish .Redlines would be awesome, they're usually a lot more helpful than critiques to me.
Here's the ref I used for the worlf on the left--[link]
I cannot find the pose ref I used for the other. D:
redlines on that wing would be great, too.
Also, if you're going to critique. please write a quality critique. Just saying the leg looks funny does not help at all. -.-
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aww these are just adorable i loooove em! o3o well anyways... i like how u got the wings and everything about em!...and a nice backround thats waht i ike to see! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/w/w… " width="15" height="15" alt="
well i like the fur i like everything!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
i think its perfect and they fith perfect togheter in whit the backround! eeeep i love it! u can be proud of urself its nicely done! and i belive that u can go out there and do it bether even! but as i have said i like pictures whit backround thats what i like!
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Also, if you're going to critique. please write a quality critique. Just saying the leg looks funny does not help at all. -.-
I'd suggest that the next time you write a critique you actually try to help the artist and not just say 'omg this is so awesome' while giving the clearly unfinished piece a medicore rating.
Be specific about what you like in the pic and also say what you don't like, include HOW it can be improved. -The arists asked for a Redline, meaning that she is unsure of the anatiomy/proportions; That should promt you to write something about said anatomy.
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-______________- k....and..was it something else? i am from norway has a lil problem understanding and...i just wanted to try critiquing thats why i do it so bad! cus its my first time just as u know!
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There is nothing wrong in being new to something/being nice but you see, the critique feature is a place where you should be completely honest with the artists, that's all I said.
It still was a very nice comment of course.
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If I were to critique anything, it would be the wings- if you are trying to be realistic, the wings should be much larger than that, and the feathers more spread at the tips. I've been practicing wings and can probably redline it if you'd like :] If you just added the wings for show, then any size you prefer is fine :]
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I would try to help, but I'm not that great at anatomy Dx Either way, i'm SURE it'll come out amazing!! 
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The left(to us) paw on the right wolf looks a little bit wrong. I think the angle isn't right, you should turn it a little bit down. thats just my opinion and my english sucks so plz tell me if you don't understand..
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I think the front legs of the winged wolf should be a bit longer. The left one seems very short but it's very beautiful the drawing
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I think the hindpaw (that is raised) on the wolf without the wings, looks tilted to far upward (the toes on it I mean). You usually don't get quite that veiw of the pawpads in that pose on that paw.
Otherwise this look absolutely amazing! Very beautifully done (even though its only a sketch). I hope that was a good enough critique ^^" I only wanted to point out the paw, otherwise I can't find any other flaws.
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LOL ffffffail red lines.... --->>> [link]
I did my best though... D8
ugh... I should study poses more... sorry if I confused you XD
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Not fail! They're really helpful. <3
Thankya Ster!
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LOL If they are any help at all, then it's worth it 
Can't wait to see the final product 8D
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I think the wolf on the left's right leg looks too small, in general. But that's really all I could help you with >_< I don't know wolf anatomy too well.
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It looks like the two wolves are supposed to be looking at each other? It's hard to tell without pupils. XD But with the angle of the wolf on our right, it looks like he's further ahead than the winged one. Yet the wolf on the right appears to be looking forward(towards the other wolf), while the winged wolf looks like it's looking back(towards the other wolf), if that makes sense?
I'd say move the wolf on the right back a little bit and/or make him a tad smaller so he looks slightly further away.
I'm not very good at perspective type stuff, so I could be completely off. XDD
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THE LEG LOOKS FUNNY
.... i'd suggest moviing the left (my left, not it's left) from paw of the winged one more toward the chest, i think it's a bit too far to the side~
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[link] sucky i know D: try making the wing smaller but less choppy like i did
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Unless they're for show only the wings should be bigger...
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You are a very talented artist, I see improvement with everyone of your drawings, even if it is just a sketch. I'm sure it will come out beautifully. C:
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Well, if you will still need it, I might try it tomorrow, also in some hours, to help you with the sketch. Right now I already am in bed, so no drawing anymore for today.
I see some mistakes already, but as you say, lines help more than critique. And constructive critique is rare to find.
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My anatomy is fail so I think it wouldn't help much if I redlined~
However, this is quite beautiful. I can't wait to see the finished result. I love the composition! And the overall feel of it
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the one with the wings could have a little longer legs
but it does look awesome so far CB
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The only thing I'd suggest is lengthen the front legs on the winged wolf just a tad ^^ because they seem a bit too short; even for foreshortening 
I'm not too familiar with either pose, but I can try and help
Don't expect much though since I'm honestly so rusty with certain things I may goof it up more in the red line. But, for you, I try! :3
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Thankya Sterlin'. :3
Yeah, I was feeling that about those legs,too. *I'm bad with perspective*
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You're welcome. I shall see if I can help with a redline (which may actually be blue mind you) but I may fail as well. However, it's worth it to at least TRY and help out a friend :3
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What are people asking for when they say Redline please? (sry noob to DA still)
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A redline is where you go over someone's sketch and correct mistakes they're made. Here's one I did a while back: [link]
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Agh, I would if I could D: But I'm afraid dI don't know that much about canine anatomy and perspectives.
/useless comment
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