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Published: 2015-03-12 15:01:48 +0000 UTC; Views: 2867; Favourites: 40; Downloads: 0
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This house is evilThere's no joy in this place
Only sorrow and despair
Occupy this space
Hell is present
It's darkness lingers
I hear the demons whisper
And feel their ice cold fingers
Mama is always crying
The demons torment her too
We both feel like dying
Cause life is black and our hearts bleed
We don't have much money
And ate every little today
Everytime we try to get ahead
These damn demons stand in the way
This is a dark house
Where the sun never shines
This house never changes It's trapped in bad times
This is a dark house
Where black rains always fall
Flooding this house with cold sorrows
Where we slowly drown behind hell's wall
Shadows dancing everywhere
Stealing all our dreams
Filling our hearts with so much fear
Our souls are unable to scream
Our tears fall heavily in sorrow
But you won't see us cry
All alone in this dark house
Mama and I just want to die
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Thank you and I could not agree with you more
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Thank you so much dear Riki.....a lot of truth to that
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Thank you for your caring words. I understand your feelings I am always here if you want a hug
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we all need a hug -also here for you friend
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Awww thank you for saying that
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A very beautiful, but dark, heavy poem, penetrating the soul with cold tentacles. I have a feeling that the person who wrote this was in the deepest depression from a hopeless situation. Very strongly written!
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Yes my husbands life growing up in an abusive home unfortunately. I think that what happens to you growing up affects you in life as you grow into adulthood Thank you so much Anna for commenting on this
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Oh, I'm so sorry about his childhood... But he is very talented lyricist! My pleasure, dear Melissa)))))))
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I appreciate your support Anna and I have to agree with you.
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Wow...I never discovered this part of your gallery. And though he does write dark, it’s really good...amazing. I’ve also experienced a similar upbringing. Sort of make my hear race to read this. 
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Thank you for checking out his poems. And for your comment. I wanted to share his poetry with others as I felt it was worth reading. He grew up in an abusive home and if this was a reality for you too I am so deeply sorry no child should grow up in a home like that it will affect the way you see life into the future.
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I'm sorry for all of that, and yes...no child should have to, but many do. Thank you dear.
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Yes this is true and thank you again Maryellen
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This is why we should be kind and considerate to those who we cross paths with. The line "But you won't see us cry" reminds me that we many times never know what others are going thru.
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I totally agree with you about this Steve. It seems you have a gentle and loving heart. Appreciate the comment
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Oh Arthur I sure hope you haven't
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Yes he sure did it's a tough world we live in my friend. Ty for reading it
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You sure have talent and I wish you all of the very best!
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He really had a talent and so do you, I will enjoy reading more of your poetry and view more of your work.
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Thank you so much I very much appreciate hearing that.
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Okay, I'll act as your editor, and when I see any errors, I'll let you know as I read through them. : )
If you could do what you pleased with them, I'd encourage you, or someone, to at least make collections out of them, and finally actualize the dream by putting them into book form. Perhaps if he saw it in such a form, he might pursue publication of it himself, or grant permission to you, or for someone to, if they wanted to. It's easy. All you do is gather together ones you like, perhaps sectioning the book according to themes or whatnot, write an intro, info here and there, type up the poems in a file that is in a format acceptable to, say, Amazon, and make a cover.
Or, he can just keep on dreaming about it, if he even does still.
"I saw my life branching out before me like the green fig tree in the story. From the tip of every branch, like a fat purple fig, a wonderful future beckoned and winked. One fig was a husband and a happy home and children, and another fig was a famous poet and another fig was a brilliant professor, […] and another fig was an Olympic lady crew champion, and beyond and above these figs were many more figs I couldn't quite make out. I saw myself sitting in the crotch of this fig tree, starving to death, just because I couldn't make up my mind which of the figs I would choose. I wanted each and every one of them, but choosing one meant losing all the rest, and, as I sat there, unable to decide, the figs began to wrinkle and go black, and, one by one, they plopped to the ground at my feet."(Sylvia Plath, The Bell Jar, Chapter 7)
Don't want to see that happen to his poems, or to his dream of being a published poet, speaking as a fan of his work.
Perhaps someone has to go out on a limb with this one, and then perhaps all can enjoy the fruits of someone's labor.
In the first stanza's fifth line, "It's" needs to be "Its" - for it is not a contraction of "it is".
Second stanza's second line, I'd add in a comma before "too".
Third stanza's third line, you need to separate that line into two lines properly.
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I would appreciate it. I would like to put them out there properly. But I am not a poet although I would of loved to be one. I thought of it many times in the past. I would had wrote love poems and of course mannequin poems!!!I do not know if I would go through all the trouble of trying to get them published without asking him first. And then there might be a possibility it may turn out to be not successful it would be depressing for him. The next time he calls if ever I would definitely ask him about it. Thank you for suggesting it. And for all your kind words. I see that your a Sylvia Plath fan I have to say she is good without a doubt.
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But Melissa, you can still try your hand at writing one at any time during your life. I do not know how old or young you are, but it's never too early, never too late. The page awaits you, my dear. Flowers, love, mannequins - write about something you like, something personal, some experience you had, emotion you felt, person you met, something you dreamed, something from your imagination. Don't just think about it, just do it. One isn't born a writer, one makes oneself a writer. That is precisely a theme I am running with in my current book I'm working on, in regards to creating art. One can see just how artist Robert C. Tracy did just that through the years. My art archive of his work is extensive and evidences it. I'm making pins of everything, so I can link to them in my book.
Anyway, yeah, if he ever calls, do say something about it. But with the way you speak though, it seems like you two don't stay in touch. I know my ex and I don't. Neither do I with my daughter. She may not even know who I am she was so young the last time I talked to her. Probably better that way. For her, at least.
Yeah, there is a possibility that he won't be "successful", and become depressed over it, but I haven't, I have hardly seen any sales myself, but that does not reflect in any way whatsoever how successful I consider myself for having written and published each expression.
"The only kind of success to desire is success with yourself." (artist John Sloan)
Right.
Try writing a couplet.
Two lines that have end rhyme.
It's a lot easier than you think.
You should try it some time.
I just wrote that stanza in seconds.
Why don't you try,
structuring your reply,
in poem form,
like I just did?
It's a start! : )
It's not very hard! : )
I encourage you to,
though you don't have to. : )
You would have loved to have been a poet,
but you can still be one, don't you forget it.
Some stems for you, that you could try writing on, too:
If I had a car
or
If I could drive
or
If I owned a mannequin
or
I want to own
a mannequin
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My brains are too scrambled and I just don't have the gift of gab. I have a lot of stress in my life. I appreciate your inspiration Steven I really do I used to be the type of person that would not let anything stand in the way of what she set out to do but so much of that determination in me is gone, Call it just life in general got int he way My ex and I used to keep int ouch more often but life I do sometimes speak with one of his very best friends and at first he seems to be doing well in his life then things turned sour and he never seem to find that special one in his life. I think he really lost his direction and I think he never got over the break up. Thanks again for being a friend
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I don't have the gift of gab, either. And for that matter, I'm not good with small talk, chatting people up, a whole lot of other things that involve social interaction.
That is so sad to hear of the stress in your life. I do not have a clue as to what causes yours, so I cannot make any moves towards trying to reduce it any for you, but I have plenty of it myself in my own life, and that is part of why I turn to art.
Yeah, I've noticed that as I get older, motivation is getting harder and harder as things look ever more grim not only in my life, but in the world as well, but once I get motivated there is no stopping me. I follow through with all my artistic endeavours eventually, for I'm always able to find a way to complete them. Inspiration, as well as having or wanting to express something, are the motive forces, the main motivators.
Thanks for the virtual hug! They always feel so good, coming from you!
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I think most people are stressed about something. But to be honest with you although I do appreciate your trying to inspire me into writing I have to say that poetry is not something that I do not think I would be very passionate about. But I thank you for your friendship and for always corresponding with me. It's always pleasurable to have a friend that you can share things with
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He creates art out of his life experiences, no matter if they are dark poems or not, there is beauty inherent in his self-expressions. I love his rhythm and rhyme.
Can you do whatever you want to with his poems, since they are yours?
Many could probably identify with his writing, relate to it in some way, or just appreciate them for what they are, as I can.
I'd be making an ebook out of them immediately, if I were you. Even if you don't want to publish it, they'd be together in said form, you could easily share in private circulation, or pass on, etc.
I'm slowly making my way through the ones you shared here, having only read two, but you mentioned hundreds, that I may want to read, too. But I have a lot of work to do on my current writing project on the art/bio book on artist Robert C. Tracy, so it won't be any time soon. Just saying.
Curious, are you the one making spelling errors when typing them up here, or are they his errors?
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Thank you so much Steven you being a writer would be the best critique to most of his poetry. I guess I could do as I pleased them since I have put them out there and exposed them now and his writings. I have hundreds of his poem. I had told him to put them into a book many times but he was a dreamer and said he was going to do this eventually and never has. He is like one of them people that often dreams about doing so many things and go nowhere. If there are errors tell me I may have missed them. Thanks for your observation
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It's really well written by him, Melissa, and sad no doubt. Some of the sections/parts really makes me conjure up some very graphic images. Especially shadows dancing...that part scared me the most, because of a weird personal experience of my own years back.
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Thank you James for commenting on this I enjoy hearing your opinion. I did not know that you had a similar experience in your life. I am glad that you found Jesus and I think that is what made your whole life change. I would say that a part of me felt that Frankie was delusional. I have so many of his poems that are really very disturbing.
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Gosh, I wonder what each of them are like. Yes, having Jesus in my life is the best thing ever, and I hope that the weird stuff that has happened over the many years in this very house won't come back.
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