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In Vain of Venus
Published: 2016-11-08 05:18:00 +0000 UTC; Views: 2084; Favourites: 76; Downloads: 0
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This is the tale of the beauty of Venus
and how she was showered with love.
Men would come from afar to sail
to her and profess, How I love thee, Aphrodite!
their tries, however, ended in vain and death,
and while she lived, immortal, on her planet.
Twas not until Hermes came to her planet
And cried, oh great Venus!
Let me have thee, even if death
doth end my life tomorrow, love.
Let me give you my heart, Aphrodite,
and together, around the world, we could sail.
But the goddess did not want to sail
and she felt weary of leaving her planet.
I do not love thee, said Aphrodite
And sent heartbroken Hermes from Venus.
He traveled back to Earth, rejected, unloved.
and after many eons, found Death.
However she may not love you, said Death,
and may reject the beauty of your sail.
You will find solace in my love.
Though I may not have a planet
as beautiful as her Venus.
I will love you more than Aphrodite.
Her words drifted up to Aphrodite,
who grew more and more livid at Death.
She flew down from her throne on Venus
and appeared in front of Hermesβ sails.
How could someone without her own planet
be capable of adorning thee with true love?
The same way the goddess of Love
could crush the hearts of men, Aphrodite.
I do not care if she has aΒ planet.
So long as I find love in Death,
I shall set my sails,
towards happiness; away from you and Venus.
To which Aphrodite turned, furious, as he sailed
Away from her planet, her beautiful Venus,
toward the outstretched immortal arms of love in Death
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Wow I love the last line, especially "love in death"
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I am always impressed by anyone who can write a decent sestina. This one is truly beautiful.
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Thank you! It's actually my first sestina, I usually prefer pantoums.
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Do you write for anything else? Movies, books?
The description here are very visual.
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As far as writing, no. I don't write for anything. I do draw, and plan on pursuing an Art degree, so perhaps the visuals come from that?
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Lovely piece! Congrats on the DD
(clearly, Hermes doesn't know Thanos that well, or he'd realize courting Death isn't a fantastic idea)
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Thank you!
I think that, like Hermes, whenever we find a place of love after heartbreak, we become blind to its pitfalls and perils. However, even it does exist, maybe the important part is that we found love again in the end?
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I wouldn't know, at least when it comes to love, but I think that's a good way of looking at life. Bad stuff always happens sooner or later, so you've got to enjoy the good stuff while you can, even (or especially) if it's not going to last.
And you're welcome
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Congratulations on your much deserved DD!Β Enjoy the limelight.
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Hehe thank you very much! I don't know what to say it's been a spectacular day!
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Thank you! Have a wonderful day yourself!
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I like the use of Hermes/Mercury as the catalyst of the poem.
Nicely done, congrats on the DD!
Perhaps Death's "planet" is actually the sun?
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Thank you very much! When working on this poem, I imagined Death's planet to be, well, the void of space/death itself, or perhaps the Underworld although the sun would be an interesting one!
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I'm very glad I'm studying Greek mythology right now. It allowed me to really appreciate how Aphrodite acts; vain is a good way to describe her, to say the least.
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Yup. One thing I've noticed is that Greek Gods and Goddesses are kinda all crazy, save a few.Β
I personally like Norse mythology better, I think it presents a better set of stories/Gods to be honest.
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Ain't that the truth?
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However she may not love you, said Death,
and may reject the beauty of your sail.
You will find solace in my love.
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You're very welcome, I'm happy you like it! I certainly enjoyed writing a sestina!
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