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Drastic-AfterthoughtPeople Living in Tunnels Under Las Vegas by-nc-sa
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Description The newspaper headlines told me so.
As I was reading the article in my bed,
eating a handful of Oreos, I thought
about being wet.

Not the kind of wet (slipperyslidyfuntimes)
you want to be,
but the kind of wet you feel in your bones.
Wet like the time my grandfather left me and my sister
watching his tackle box by the side of the road
in Toronto in six inches of slush that
was slowly seeping into my socks,
while he bought cigarettes from the man
in the oversized poncho at the gas station.

And there are cities full of dreams
and cities full of dirt,
but Las Vegas is neither of those.
It’s a city instead with no name or face,
nothing recognizable you can reach out and touch.
Someone told me once that in Spanish
Las Vegas means “the fields.”

My grandfather told me once
on a fishing trip, while I sat
on top of his tackle box,
about the Asphodel fields.
How these Romans believed
people whose sins equaled the good they did
went to the Asphodel fields, and drank
from a river that made them forget themselves,
and became ghosts
who flit like shadows on the banks.
I liked the stories about heroes better;
when my grandfather told those
he’d hit his knee and let me sit there
and hold his cigarettes while he was talking.

Back in the Tunnels of Las Vegas,
the people have started a library,
sealing their books in plastic wrap
and keeping them in blue crates
marked alphabetically by title.
In the fields above, men with no faces
sluggishly slip dollars into the thong
of a stripper who can no longer smile.
A girl in the tunnels pulls out a book on Toronto
and learns about snow.
My grandfather sits in a nursing home
connected to an oxygen tank, and tells
my son about Hades and how
under the Asphodel fields was the marsh,
where the river Lethe would flood and
1000s of souls, from time to time,
would fall into the cold wet water
and be taken in the current to
The Elm, where false dreams cling.

As I walk with my son to the car,
a man in a poncho, driving too fast
hits a puddle and splashes us with water.
The Oreos in my son’s pocket immediately
turn to mush, and his socks become
uncomfortably wet.

The Tunnel People from Las Vegas
have been there for five years,
fashioning a shower out of a water cooler,
hanging paintings on the walls,
kissing, smiling, having dates,
and living with cool water up to their ankles.
I tell my son not to worry about being wet,
and he smiles at me and I smile at him
and we drive home to our house in Toronto
far away from fields.

A man in the tunnels finds a tackle box,
that has washed in with the flood.
Opening it, he finds inside there is a note
that says “Sorry about the snow, love Grandpa.”
Researching with a team of scientists,
he writes an article about how double-stuffed
Oreos do not have double the icing.

The stripper in Las Vegas gets off her shift
and drinks vodka straight from the bottle,
trying to forget. Always trying
to forget. She walks outside. It is snowing,
in Las Vegas, just like it snowed when she
was a child, at home, in Toronto. She calls
her sister. I pick up the phone
and say “Hello.”
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Comments: 61

Glo-stikz [2013-10-29 22:14:39 +0000 UTC]

I love the way you connect everything together, from the Oreos to the tackle box. It's amazing

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to Glo-stikz [2013-11-10 19:59:01 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much!

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tinybreeann [2013-10-20 19:23:56 +0000 UTC]

Congrats on the Daily Deviation!

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to tinybreeann [2013-11-10 19:59:16 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much!

i've been without internet and just saw

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tinybreeann In reply to Drastic-Afterthought [2013-11-10 20:28:25 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!

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ShaozChampion [2013-10-18 06:51:37 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful. For you to be out of the comfort zone for a moment, you earned a DD ^^. Well deserved for this piece

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to ShaozChampion [2013-11-10 19:59:27 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much.

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ocean-whispers [2013-10-18 05:24:42 +0000 UTC]

it all comes together at the end.  this poem is sort of like a 123 321 style, i think. 


great job and congratulations on your DD! 

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to ocean-whispers [2013-11-10 19:59:39 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much!

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Fawnspirit24 [2013-10-18 04:58:15 +0000 UTC]

This is amazing. Well deserved DD!

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to Fawnspirit24 [2013-11-10 19:59:51 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much!

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TheGalleryOfEve [2013-10-18 03:04:09 +0000 UTC]

Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!!

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to TheGalleryOfEve [2013-11-10 20:00:14 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much!

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xXSpiritualArtistXx [2013-10-18 03:03:51 +0000 UTC]

Absolutely fantabulous!
This is incredible and lovely and amazing and I can't think of a way suitable enough to describe it~

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to xXSpiritualArtistXx [2013-11-10 20:00:23 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much!

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PostJudgement [2013-10-18 02:23:15 +0000 UTC]

Love it!

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to PostJudgement [2013-11-10 20:00:33 +0000 UTC]

thanks a lot!

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Jirachichu [2013-10-18 01:47:51 +0000 UTC]

Being someone who's lived in Vegas their entire life, I actually have never seen snow

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to Jirachichu [2013-11-10 20:00:59 +0000 UTC]

you should definitely see some if possible.

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stlcrazy [2013-10-18 00:55:25 +0000 UTC]

Really nice, very impressed.

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to stlcrazy [2013-11-10 20:01:07 +0000 UTC]

thank you!

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spider123357 [2013-10-17 23:59:09 +0000 UTC]

Beautifully written! 

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to spider123357 [2013-11-10 20:01:15 +0000 UTC]

thank you! 

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spider123357 In reply to Drastic-Afterthought [2013-11-10 20:01:42 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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Rema-Alkhany [2013-10-17 19:40:04 +0000 UTC]

nice,thanks

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to Rema-Alkhany [2013-11-10 20:01:24 +0000 UTC]

thanks!

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Rookanga1945 [2013-10-17 18:21:46 +0000 UTC]

I don't have any words for how I feel about this, but I wanted to comment to let you know that iI appreciate it.

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to Rookanga1945 [2013-11-10 20:02:42 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much!

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MiWag [2013-10-17 18:05:36 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much for this! I love it!

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to MiWag [2013-11-10 20:03:00 +0000 UTC]

thank you for the comment!

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Ari-Heart-Matsuri [2013-10-17 17:02:42 +0000 UTC]

I love the way the people in this poem are all connected to each other. Profoundly beautiful, and it's really moving. This is one of the poems that will stick with me. 

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to Ari-Heart-Matsuri [2013-11-10 20:03:11 +0000 UTC]

thank you for the comment!

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Ari-Heart-Matsuri In reply to Drastic-Afterthought [2013-12-10 18:51:16 +0000 UTC]

It's truly amazing <3

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sciencevsart [2013-10-17 13:57:31 +0000 UTC]

The words and verses are like music. Sad, happy harps and quiet pianos. The pictures you paint are so painful and bright.

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to sciencevsart [2013-11-10 20:03:25 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much

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squirrels-are-evil [2013-10-17 13:42:09 +0000 UTC]

What a fantastic read, the suprise at the end even caught me. Very good work here

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to squirrels-are-evil [2013-11-10 20:03:38 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much,

i'm glad you liked it

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KanePaws [2013-10-17 13:33:17 +0000 UTC]

...the man
in the oversized poncho at the gas station.

There are ponchos of the "well-sized" variety?

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to KanePaws [2013-11-10 20:03:58 +0000 UTC]

haha, some better than others!

thanks for the comment!

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ThetaSigma7 [2013-10-17 13:15:37 +0000 UTC]

Thought provoking. Emotion prodding. Inspirational piece.

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to ThetaSigma7 [2013-11-10 20:04:08 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much!

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ThetaSigma7 In reply to Drastic-Afterthought [2013-11-10 20:51:26 +0000 UTC]

Quite welcome!

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overUnderTime [2013-10-17 12:15:30 +0000 UTC]

Comfort zone habitation can beget forgetfulness; many ('try' to) forget in order 'become' comfortable.  [Jeg håber Goldbarth kan godt lide dit output, her.]

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to overUnderTime [2013-11-10 20:05:41 +0000 UTC]

thank you! [Jeg kan kun håbe, at han ville blive underholdt.]

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Blacksand459 [2013-10-17 12:14:27 +0000 UTC]

Excellent!!! This is one of the best poems I've read in a long time. (And I read poems everyday.) 

 

 Congrats on a well-earned DD!

 

 

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to Blacksand459 [2013-11-10 20:05:50 +0000 UTC]

thank you!

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mizzmint [2013-10-17 10:26:09 +0000 UTC]

Congratulations on having your piece featured as one of today's Daily Deviations!

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Drastic-Afterthought In reply to mizzmint [2013-11-10 20:05:57 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much.

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mizzmint In reply to Drastic-Afterthought [2013-11-12 02:52:25 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome!

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Lintu47 [2013-10-17 09:04:34 +0000 UTC]

    Congrats on the DD! Have a nice day!

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