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elsevilla β Hamadryad lament 04
Published: 2008-12-02 23:10:57 +0000 UTC; Views: 49519; Favourites: 1417; Downloads: 0
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Jolene Headhunter appears, well only psycally her toughts were already since page one.thanxs to for helping me out with the text, she did a great job.
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the few pages i saw where awesome...there is more of this?
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.....dime como se llama el comic te prometo que lo conseguire y lo comprare XD
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me encanta la tercera vinyeta y el arma de la ultima es estupenda, muy buen trabajo y muy buena galeriaΒ‘
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Impossible!!You're great painter,thank you for your works....I'm your fan^^
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This is first-rate stuff.
Questions: did you continue it ?
and where is p. 03 ?
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I want to see more of this!
Are you still doing this comic
or did you stop?
I hope you haven't!
I love the panel where she smiles, it's great.
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so...she's going to kill them...with one arm? XD
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some thing told me a comic my you would be the greating shit i've ever seen. Speaking on comics, do you have any that are out that i can buy?
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your stuff inspires the hell outa me. thank you.
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wow increible... cuando sale lo siguiente??
la historia parece interesante...
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I love the bottom panel. Very detailed and I like how you build up the suspense.
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Man wish I could smile after a wound like that. (Or still be alive at least) Great page looking forward to more!
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Lovely lovely! I can't wait to see more of this.
:3
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i love that huuuuuuuuuge closeup of the sniper lady in the last panel. beautiful colors... and i hope she wins the battle!!!! O______O
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hahahah yeah we hope so
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I love the characters and the work can't wait to see more
^^
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you wont goona believe this but i was working on page 5 twice, and the computer shut down, so i had to start all over it, but now im saving every single step i do
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aaaaaargh! sort of makes you believe in a great cosmic super villain doesn't it?
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Diooos que ganas tenΓa de ver a Jolene en acciΓ³n ;_;
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he tenido problemas con la compu para la 5 pero ya trabajare en ella esta semana
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That's great man! I'm loving it! keep with it the great job *_*
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I love the conversation going on between the little heads. It's like Jolene's got her own little audience! And it seems they can be pretty useful too. This character rocks~
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Hahaha...that's a twist. didn't expect that after the last page. nice work!
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I was wondering if Bonnie got her name from "Bonnie and Clyde"...
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lol, this is awesome. I love the random talking inbetween.
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see parece q sirvio la ayuda pq el guion esta de pelos...muy buenos los textos
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Oh no... That is one smart girlie... xD; then again, if you knew you weren't going to die at the shot, I guess it wouldn't really matter getting sniped... xD;
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I think the artwork is really impressive. You're doing a really good job at digital coloring. But I feel that the blood looks a bit too much slappy added, epecially in the first panel, though its color is well chosen. And I enjoyed the shining effect in the last panel.
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gahhhhh your awesome. Where did you learn to use a tablet and Photoshop like that?
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If you plan on releasing this in English, I highly, HIGHLY recommend you find and partner up with a writer who speaks English as a first language. Someone who really knows what they're doing.
And grammar isn't the only thing. For example: in real life, you don't ask if "someone pwned something." That's a word that was mistakenly created on the internet and you won't find it in any dictionary. That's really distracting and doesn't fit the context, because only nerds speak it in real life and that doesn't seem to fit the character.
Your English is great, but it takes so much more than that to write a good script.
Anyway...good luck with your comic.
The art is spectacular as always.
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I think you're wrong to be honest...
you say that in real life only a nerd would ask "did you pwn her?"... well in the last panel she says "All of you shut up" this implies that all 3 of the comments immediately before that are made by different people, these people are likely to be people of Jolene Headhunter's team or party... Doesnt a team usually have someone remarkably clever among them? someone that works with computers a lot? a nerd?
so yeah, i dont think '
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Yeah, there usually is the token nerd.
But point is, it's way out of place. It just throws off the rhythmn, and is kinda one of those "wtf" moments.
That was just one example, though.
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Yes, i have to agree that this comment does throw the rhythmn of the panel off course a little...
but maybe the fantastic, amazing and uuuberly cool artist was trying to make the speech sound more realistic... because in real life speech doesn't always flow smoothly... just goes to show how cool elsevilla really is
....maybe
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Nice try.
I'm just trying to look at it from an objective view. Publishers would have edited that out if they'd accept his work.
And just so you know, I'm not arguing to be a douche; I just don't want to encourage bad habits.
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