stevecook23 [2010-06-10 16:11:34 +0000 UTC]
Haha, yes, I can see the Saw references, almost; flesh-eating beetles, creepy.There's a few things missing from this, perhaps; why was she there? Maybe we'd be told this later. She's not suggesting any things herself either, but maybe that's normal for someone stuck in a room with flesh-eating beetles There are three 'now' that have somehow come out as 'not', changing the meaning of the sentences, in one case quite a lot; "what was once a simple swarm of beetles was not a writhing sea of them" Just so you know.
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EvilKingGumby In reply to stevecook23 [2010-06-10 17:13:34 +0000 UTC]
lol yeah i hate my typo's because i make the same types of typo's a LOT.... of/fo, about/abotu/now/not etc etc.. lol. the worst is when i typo 2 words and end up getting "abou tit" lol.... I'll have to review this, try an fix the problems and maybe offer a bit of inner monologue to the scene without breaking the air of confusion and sinister pace.. I totally owe you a llama. And a ice decanter of solid Rum while i am at it.
stevecook23 In reply to EvilKingGumby [2010-06-10 22:06:58 +0000 UTC]
Ooooooooooh rum. No worries, I bought some more tonight
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