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Ferelwing — All the trust gone
Published: 2010-07-10 22:53:40 +0000 UTC; Views: 1066; Favourites: 45; Downloads: 11
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Is it wrong to wish you death?Is it wrong to wish you pain?
Why is it when I stare
I see your face in the pouring rain
All I feel is the cruelty
And slowly I burn,
with smoldering hatred
Retribution, so I yearn
It comes and it goes
The more I try to forget
It surprises me with its strength
Sneaking up bit by bit
How dare you claim that you "hardly blame" me
When the blame rests solely on you
Why did you abandon me?
Never mind, that's just what you do
There are no answers that will explain
The words you spoke, my rage to tame
You hated the outcome that it felt wrong
But with you, it's always the same song
You never meant to hurt me and never wanted to
But it seems that's all you've ever done
And all you'll ever do
You step up, tell me trust you and just believe
Then when I finally do just that, you up and leave
Hot or cold it's all the same
I end up betrayed
Always the same apology
This is the trap you laid
Claiming I'm seeing it black and white
You put the blame on me
I'm standing up for what's right
You're so blind you cannot see
You claim it's torture to look in the mirror
But it never seemed to end
Always the same fear
And I never got to mend
It wasn't you crying for what you've done
It was always me
You were always on the run
Can't trust you to see
Every time I close my eyes and try to let go
I hear your words replay
Crocodile tears you show
Don't stand the light of day
So you've robbed me of the trust I had
And made me ever wary
I'd say it's to bad
But on your actions you'd not tarry.
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Comments: 14
Wow! This is very to the point. Just a question, but were you inspired to write this after a bad relationship? I only ask as I recently came a cropper from a young lady who I thought was on the same page as me. Turns out she wasn't
I know what you mean about the hatred and the resentment. Feeling as though your being made to shoulder the blame for the disaster, even when the true responsibility rested elsewhere. Sharing your heart with someone you thought you could trust and falling for their lies when they tell you how they feel exactly the same, even when they so very don't!... Ahem. Sorry, got a bit carried off there!
Anyway, superb piece. I can't give you a decent critique for I am not skilled in literature enough. All I will say is that it's packed with true emotion that grasps you the minute you read. It's honest in it's delivery and refuses to sacrifice it's message. This sort of writing is one of my favourites as it gets straight to the point rather than baffle and confuse. I will therefore add this to my favourites, forthwith!
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I'm really glad you liked it and I'm really glad you could relate on one level and on another really sad you've had to experience it
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Not to worry. Eventually the hurt stops... Eventually
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"It's not me it's you..." that's more common than people relize.
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Ugh! Pearls before swine! 
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I am glad to hear that the state of mind has resumed control...
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It is powerful, is it meant to be in a form of rap?
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Not originally but I think you have a point that it could be read as one.
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