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aychh [2010-07-03 04:32:32 +0000 UTC]
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so! first things first: i think it's a cute idea, and the overall result is very cute and charming. however, the whole "cute" aspect doesn't really match up with what mood you're trying to convey. i would think that a cute design with dreary colours would show the exact opposite, optimisim if anything. sadness is tricky to convey, but even harder to effectively with a cutesy style. you do however, have the right idea with the colours.
okay, considering the more technical aspects. i think the whole holding an umbrella thing is a tad cliche, you should try expressing emotion in your artwork in ways no one's thought of before. yes, an umbrella in the picture usually implies a melancholy feeling, but it's something thats pretty universally known. try being out of the box, give a whole new meaning to the word "sad" for the people that see the picture.
the hand doesn't seem to be holding the umbrella, the way it's shown here, the umbrella would topple over quite quickly. maybe bend the arm, and make the hand grip up higher. and the other arm just looks kinda awkward to me personally, as it gives off the feeling you were trying to hide the hand. it just doesn't look like a very natural pose, is what i mean. i think in this picture, it would work much better if the left arm was just down to the side, rather than going behind him.
overall, it's nice and cute, it just needs some work on looking a bit more natural, and conveying the idea behind it more.
i apologize in advance that this critique kinda jumps around, didn't realize it til right now aha e.deviantart.net/emoticons/a/a… " width="19" height="19" alt="" title="Sweating a little..."/>
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aychh In reply to FreeSpiritWolf [2010-07-03 06:26:52 +0000 UTC]
ah im sorry if i made it seem that way, i totally didn't catch myself on that XD
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FreeSpiritWolf In reply to UsagiTenshi [2010-07-03 05:59:34 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much for the kind critique! Very nicely said, for the first one I ever had. c: I see you have noticed the emotions I've attempted to convey, you described that nicely too in a way I can understand. (and also something good for others viewers to see written about it as well.) Many thanks again, I had no problem at all deciding on the fairness of the critique! ;D
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FreeSpiritWolf In reply to Sakilia [2010-07-01 19:50:34 +0000 UTC]
Glad you think so! Cx Yeahh you should! I can't believe mine survived through Mexico... XD At least I got 1 picture... I want to post it but I don't know lol XD I'm holding him by his hand in front of the sunset .^_^.
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Sakilia In reply to FreeSpiritWolf [2010-07-02 15:46:35 +0000 UTC]
Post it XD! It sounds awesome ;3
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