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hypnothalamus β 'The Fall'
Published: 2011-04-12 12:37:34 +0000 UTC; Views: 16374; Favourites: 826; Downloads: 306
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We are falling from the top of a thousand storey building.The girl to my left dreams of flying.
The guy in front can only feel the wind in his face.
I mostly contemplate the concrete below.
We get distracted by the occasional passage of birds.
On the horizon clouds gather in marvelous shapes. I smile and tell them about it. They look and smile back at me.
Abruptly the horizon disappears.
The concrete is soft and welcomes us.
And nature celebrates our Fall.
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Comments: 64
So you were the one that wrote this! I was very inspired by your poem but totally forgot where to find it. I'll remember faving your work in the future
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Love both the poem and the picture. Amazing
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It's one of your best i think. the whole piece made me think of angels.
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I featured this here [link] i hope thats ok
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i almost teared up at the disappearance of the horizon...
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I wish I could say something profound about this piece but it just snagged me, made me finish it and kept me fascinated 'till the end. I loved reading it.
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wat kinda paper did u draw one? it has a brownish color that i been looking for
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wow ur poem really IS something....
thats srsly amazing!!
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This is one of the most beautiful things I have ever read, and one of the most powerful things I have ever felt. Thank you for giving us all emotion. "The concrete is soft and welcomes us." This alone is one of the most wonderful phrases. I'm sorry I'm not making much sense, I can't really describe how this makes me feel. It's truly a marvel.
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wow 0_o they died. WOW THAT WAS SOOO AWESOME! I love how you have a nice sweet image, people having fun then, they just die. and in such a sweet way too. i really love it!
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Thatβs awesome anticipation in that pose, you can tell heβs seconds away from pouncing. great stuff.
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well, its pretty good. the fist thing that came to my head was the rain. every line fits perfect for the rain
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Wow, its really beautiful. Kinda reminds me of Animatrix: A Kid's Story. [link]
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This is amazing! It's such a beautiful poem... :')
A lot of people were talking about a spelling mistake, but it's a poem! You can spell things however you want!
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Wow the picture is amazing! And your poem really made me think
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Wow... this really gives you something to think about, it's very good.
Where'd you get the picture? 
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Stories. Not storeys.
But I love it anyways.
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Love it, but i noticed a little writing mistake. "storeys" instead of "storys". Though this didn't ruing the perfectness of it at all!
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both spellings are correct. the only difference is that 'storey' is a british english spelling while 'story' is an american english spelling. ^_^x
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Oooh, i see! Like "color" and "colour"?
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Very dynamic, you have a wonderful way of pulling the reader into your poem (bonus points because you do it in so few words 
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Wow... this is gorgeous! I'm not really into Poems, but this just caught my eye
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this really caught my attention, its different.
i like it, good job
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The picture is a great visual portrayal of your poem
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