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Khaimin — tombstones don't mark much of anything
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Published: 2015-05-29 18:09:52 +0000 UTC; Views: 679; Favourites: 36; Downloads: 0
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Description eight-year-olds don't understand
death. they don't know why the dog no longer
barks or why the cricket no longer
chirps or why the grasshopper lies still. they were brought
to life believing that we will live forever, yet the world
slams a fist, shows them
forever is never and that they will not believe
in anything so beautiful ever
again.

(they live in laughter
and in love
but sorrow shall fold them into something
so new)


sixteen-year-olds believe in something
after, though they don't quite know
what. they understand the cat didn't tear the feathers from
the bird just for the hell of
it, but for the life of it, and where did that life go?
yet they forget faith as time rolls on
and brush death from their shoulders
like dripping rain.

(they learn you can't stride on a cloud
and fall through childhood
into reality,
heavy)


thirty-two-year-olds forget that
life moves on without the ones you used to love,
and they hate it; they hold on to
rusted photographs and tinted memories gone blind,
yet still they wonder
why so much matters on what it is we
leave behind.

(they work like dogs
to be remembered as something more
than nothing at all - they
don't understand they are so very small)


sixty-four-year-olds remember they smashed
the cricket and never felt
sick over it. they know memories
fade and that's okay; feathers are just as important as
tombstones and the weight
of the world never much mattered anyway.

(and they learn while laughing
with god that the cat
did it just for the hell of it after all)
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Comments: 17

imperfect-parachute [2015-08-27 06:30:57 +0000 UTC]

Just found this in my inbox and I love it!! Beautiful work!!

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Khaimin In reply to imperfect-parachute [2015-09-10 02:19:36 +0000 UTC]

Wow, thanks!!  

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imperfect-parachute In reply to Khaimin [2015-09-12 02:04:34 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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tempest-wolf08 [2015-06-03 22:51:47 +0000 UTC]

Love it.

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Khaimin In reply to tempest-wolf08 [2015-06-04 03:13:32 +0000 UTC]

Thank you. c:

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oviedomedina [2015-06-01 01:55:51 +0000 UTC]

This was brilliant!

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Khaimin In reply to oviedomedina [2015-06-01 03:13:20 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! I'm happy you enjoyed it. c:

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oviedomedina In reply to Khaimin [2015-06-01 12:35:24 +0000 UTC]

No problem!

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wispy-blue [2015-06-01 00:44:09 +0000 UTC]

gorgeous poem. refreshing thoughts.

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Khaimin In reply to wispy-blue [2015-06-01 03:14:22 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! c:

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The-Silent-Stargazer [2015-05-31 20:58:36 +0000 UTC]

 This poem caught my attention from the first stanza, but I fell in love after that last line.

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Khaimin In reply to The-Silent-Stargazer [2015-06-01 03:14:06 +0000 UTC]

I'm so happy to hear that! Falling in love with a poem is the best feeling in the world, to me. <3

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FridgePoetProject [2015-05-30 03:58:05 +0000 UTC]

I really enjoyed the clever way you structured this one, with the eras of ages; a very effective technique, indeed.  Also decidedly ingenious that you used the prompt of "feathers" to explore the theme of weight.

This part broke my heart: 

"(they live in laughter
and in love
but sorrow shall fold them into something
so new)"

And the ending was utterly harrowing.  Wow.  Another poem well done!  

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Khaimin In reply to FridgePoetProject [2015-05-30 04:51:59 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad you enjoyed it! Honestly, folding weight into it wasn't my intention from the start, but it seemed to make sense as I moved through the piece. I'm happy it stuck out a bit. c:

<3

Thank you!

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Austori [2015-05-30 00:29:59 +0000 UTC]

There's something cynically strange and beautiful about this, I really like it, especially the ending

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Khaimin In reply to Austori [2015-05-30 04:48:57 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I like the ending, too. c:

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Austori In reply to Khaimin [2015-05-31 16:15:33 +0000 UTC]

 

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