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HalanLore [2017-01-25 15:29:17 +0000 UTC]
I like that you detailed the elements to go with his uniforms.
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A-KTheLittleFairy [2017-01-07 10:47:23 +0000 UTC]
Nice how you show Karil showing off different powers when wearing the different outfits!
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UnaOwens [2017-01-05 15:12:07 +0000 UTC]
I really like the colors for his winter outfit. Great job on this!!
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Kitanokata In reply to UnaOwens [2017-01-08 09:35:40 +0000 UTC]
Thanks! The winter outfit is my personal favorite too.
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RitellianCaptain [2017-01-04 22:48:05 +0000 UTC]
Wow, great detail!! Those patterns and designs are unique and pretty! I really like his winter jacket and his combat outfit! I also like how each outfit has a different color scheme!!
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Edge209 [2017-01-02 19:45:43 +0000 UTC]
Wow. Nice allotment of attire.
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MegaMaeve [2017-01-02 14:09:32 +0000 UTC]
The cultural mix of clothing is really, really interesting - and I love how you made it all into something that's really your own! The East Asian influence is very clear (especially in his training outfit, which reminds me a whole lot of wushu practice outfits!), and the color schemes are all really worked out and thought through! The details of his outfits - especially the detailed patterns (his summer outfit in particular) and bracelets - all look really nice, and there's a lot to see. His combat outfit looks really cool, as well as functional, which I adore!
I wonder, what kind of materials are used in his combat outfit? (I just really, really like armor XD)
The colors you used all look great together, and the color coded hierarchy is SO COOL. I also love the distinction between master and maister, and I'm very curious about the social dynamics in your world!
The snake bracelet looks amazing, too, and I greatly enjoy how its little head kinda 'peeks' out when Karil wears long-sleeved outfits. Its history is incredibly fascinating (Orochi, ha! ) and I wonder what kind of connection it has to the Stone, as well as its protectional powers.
(Also, Salep killed his parents? Oh gosh! D: That must've been a hard blow on everyone involved! Poor Karil - and Salep! There really must've been no other way to deal with... problems, I guess? D: And Karil was only thirteen- meaning it's only been a year for him, seeing he's currently 14...!)
Well, this story sounds exactly like my cup of tea - elemental bending, martial arts, nice world building, dramatic turns of events...! I am very curious for sure! Can't wait for the other tasks!
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Kitanokata In reply to MegaMaeve [2017-01-02 16:44:21 +0000 UTC]
As always thanks for the lovely comment .
About the materials for his combat gear - I really haven't thought about them. For the breast-plate the material should be hart and durable but very light. The whole concept of the combat outfit is based on shinobi clothing - maximum flexibility and freedom of movement + robust protection.
About Salep killing Karil's parents, it really is a complicated story. It should be mentioned, that Karil's parents died when he was 6 months old. when Karil met Salep at the age of 13 he had no idea of what had happened. Karil didn't even know who his real parents are - he thought that they were simple healers. His parents, together with Salep and 2 others, were actually Supreme Masters AND in addition to that meisters! (His father Han - Fire, his mother Sella - Earth, Salep is Water and the other two were Air and Mind). Karil learned by accident that Salep killed his parents, but it was only half the truth. The kid tried to avenge his family but luckily failed. He then received a special... item... pearl called the Tear of Shalimar. The tear can store memories and feelings, so Karil relived the moment when his parents were killed by his teacher 13 yaers ago and realized that there was no other way. (Attention! His parents were from the good guys and Salep is also from the good guys. Although the bad guy, The Master, was also involved.). By the way, the red stone on the snake-bracelet is the 2nd Tear of Shalimar, that had a message From Karil's dad .
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MegaMaeve In reply to Kitanokata [2017-01-06 23:16:10 +0000 UTC]
No problem! The pleasure's all mine~
Ohhhhh - shinobi clothing! It's been a while since I last looked into that! XD I believe historical shinobi armor consisted of light chain mail, and a light-weight harness made of leather or mail (small chains) that was tightly woven together - flexible, but sturdy.
(That being said, I believe most 'known' shinobi armors were actually samurai armors, but then again, it's been years since I last looked into this. Samurai armor usually is made of boiled leather, btw - light, but sturdy, and through certain sewing-methods, it can be made even sturdier (or at least, that's what my sensei once said)). Perhaps this will give you some ideas?
Oh wow. The story you just described to me makes it even more tragic, actually! D: (I wonder if The Master has something to do with the other two Supreme Masters/meisters, too...! I really wonder about the identity of The Master, actually! XD)
How did Salep and Karil meet? It must've been so hard on Salep to realize he'd left his friends' kid all alone - and then Karil becoming overwhelmed with emotion and intent on revenge...! Luckily he wasn't able to pull it off, but still. The emotional strain still is there. It makes for a very complex and intriguing relationship for sure.
The Tear of Shalimar (LOVE the name, btw!) sounds really interesting, and seems to hold mysterious yet strong powers. I suppose they're connected to The Stone of Predestination? Such interesting concepts! (And such a tragic way to find out how your not-actually-healer parents were killed...! I really feel for poor Karil...)
You've got such a cool story! You're planning on writing a novel? Its concept is really interesting!
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Kitanokata In reply to MegaMaeve [2017-01-08 09:23:39 +0000 UTC]
WOW, thank you so much about the armor tips! I think I like the leather armor idea most - it fits with my armor design.
By the way, I don't know if I asked, what martial art are you training?
About the question whether the master was involved with the Supreme Masters? Yes. First the five Supreme Masters were: Salep, Han (Karil's dad and Salep's best friend), Sella (karil's mum and Salep's Friend), Ada (Salep's fiancee) and Zuma (Salep's brother). The Master was involved in getting rid of them all. According to Salep's own words, The master single–handedly killed his brother. So thanks to The Master Salep lost his entire family.
Karil and Salep meet accidentally at first. Karil is a big fan of the Supreme masters like all kids in the City (without knowing that Han and Sella are his mum and dad). So the two bumped for the first time at midnight in front of the Three Supreme Master's statue in the City (after the last battle only the bodies of Han, Sela and Ada were found so everyone hoped that Salep and Zuma were alive. Unfortunately that was not entirely true... to some extend). Salep recognized Karil, sins the boy is a spitting image of his mum. The next day they met during Karil's water exam, where an accident with Tari occurred and Salep saved her, reviling to the whole school and lady Hariya (The City lord and Tari's grandma) that he has returned for the first time in 13 years. After Karil's final exam, under the pressure and pleading of lady Hariya (the old lady can be VERY convincing) Salep became Karil's and Tari's private tutor. Since Karil's training had to be kept secret, the boy was... forced to live under the same roof with Salep, so after a while, in addition to their student-teacher relationship, Karil started treating Salep as something between big brother and father...till the moment he learned the truth. Luckily they managed to patch up everything thanks to the Tear of Shalimar.
About the Tear, yes, it has connection to the stone, but not as you might think. Atagan was the big bad guy ca. 3000 years ago. His student Eliasssander made The Stone of Predestination to defeat him. Shalimar was Eliassander's wife/concubine AND Atagan's daughter. At least that's the official story in the legends. The truth... it's so much more frightening .
And YES! I am writing a novel. Part 1 (260+ pages) is ready, Part 2 is at page 50. Next week I'll start trying with different publishing houses. Hopefully someone will like it .
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asari13 [2017-01-02 12:18:49 +0000 UTC]
nice art
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Naefa [2017-01-01 18:03:06 +0000 UTC]
The Outfits are amazing! So many Details oO
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MizzAnthropix [2017-01-01 02:16:19 +0000 UTC]
Cool oufits bruh.
I especially like the official getup.
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LordCherryPaw [2017-01-01 01:55:46 +0000 UTC]
OwO Wow! Those are some pretty neat outfits!
Color acts as ranks, huh? O.o Hmmm...
So I wonder GOLD would be. *w*
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LordCherryPaw In reply to Kitanokata [2017-01-02 00:45:03 +0000 UTC]
Right? Can't have them shinies to reveal location to the enemy. ;3
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