The-Cloaked-One [2020-03-26 18:51:18 +0000 UTC]
Good character sheet.
I'll try and offer a few suggestions and corrections. Sally is a Titan. Titan and titanium are very different things. Titans are Greek mythical deities, titanium is a durable element on the periodic table. I suggest you change the word 'defects' into 'disadvantage.' Or just put it under as just part of who she is. She will likely have adapted to being blind and be quite formidable. Hence, the sharp senses and sharp hearing.
Spelling errors: "Likes silence & pleasant atmospheres. She devotes time to physical training and writing development (I'm not sure what you mean by writing development). She likes honesty. When Inu, her partner, gives her attention (she'll never admit it). She likes beautiful melodies, reading poetry, etc."
"Dislikes: loud noises. Pungent odors. Demons. Liars & hypocrites. Bullying."
I suggest simplifying this sheet a bit by removing a few details. Such as disliking loud noises, pungent odors, liars, hypocrites, and bullying. Most people dislike these things. She has a sense of justice, supports the weak, as most protagonists do. You want to capture your character here, but also point out what makes her stand out from other protagonists. What makes her cool and interesting.
For your description, I'll try and help spelling and grammar errors.
"Sally is my favorite character, so I finally made a reference sheet for her. I hope you enjoy her character concept, but for the time being I'm only giving out a few details on her.
History: She is the third Titan in my universe and her true name is Ever. The Titans are from a different world. They desired to create a copy of Earth, but found that it was impossible. Instead, they created a prototype and named it Enalatos. This prototype is home to many different races, including humans. The Titans were thought to be incapable of showing emotions. More so, they rejected emotions and considered them a shortcoming of the lower races. Sally, however, was able to rejoice, feel anger, love, and hate. She was exiled to Enalatos.
Abilities: Sally is able to indwell in the dead bodies of people and then live and function in society. She does not have a gender and is able to change the gender of any body she inhabits. Sally's abilities vary by her gender. As a female, she uses 50 percent dark magic. But as a male, she uses 50 percent fire magic. She can also transform people into demons by biting or scratching them. She is also well trained with the katana and martial arts despite her blindness. When her best friend, Aurora, was dying, Ever chose to try and save Aurora by turning her into a demon. This lead to Sally's blindness.
Personality: Sally may seem cold, even rude. Once she opens up, she is actually warm and fragile. She enjoys being around honest and kind people. Once attached, she will worry greatly about her friends. She is straight forward and brutally honest. She does not understand social conventions and may act inappropriately. She also is incapable of understanding jokes. Though she does appreciate being teased.
That's all for now. If you have any questions, ask them. Notify me of my mistakes. My English is not very good. Thanks for your time! <3"
I look forward to hearing more about your story. Hope this helps. Also, your English is mostly fine, I understood what you meant.
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