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Description I'm scared..."
Mainje cringed from the cold. The barren land stretched out in front of them, as vast as the skies it laid under.
Her mother turned to her. The elites face was blank, and the mist from the early morning made it hard to make out the horizon.
"You must be strong Mainje." her mother spoke strongly. "This is your first test you must remember".
Mainje looked up at her, and there eyes touched through the mist. "why mamma? Why do they test us?"
"because, every child must be tested on their strengths. Since you are my daughter, the expectations of your skills are greater then the others."
Mainje's mother was one of the finest elite forces in the Thrisher. Anything less then perfection from her ospring would lead to death.
There was a sudden pause.
Mainje ran up to her mother to shorten the distance, feeling the ancient foot prints beneath her feet. They walked in silence and the mist cleared enough for Mainje to make out the markings on her mothers crown. The engraved symbols covered her horns, while a larger marking laid in the the center of her face. Usually the more symbols, the higher your rank , but every Ayderus gets there forehead symbol while young, which was their destination at the moment. This was Mainje's first symbol she would retrieve, but her test was not over, not until she crossed the barren scape with a family member of the councils choice, her mother.
There was a sudden stop and Mainje almost fell onto her mothers leg. "look!" the elites face was in awe as the sun broke the horizon. Mainje grabbed her mothers leg and slowly looked in the direction of the elites. "wow! Its so pretty!" Mainje could not compress her squeak. The young one looked up at her mother "do you think the others are waiting for us there?"
The elite looked down at her daughter, "there waiting for you, my dear."

I have know idea if I'm a good writer or not, so bear with me

Just a little something I guess this is Mainje's first test as it said before. They are walking the path of life, its a decider on who is worthy to live as an Ayderus if you live, you are given your mark (that they carve into your head, each one is different) Many others have walking in this path (as you can see, the foot prints) but not all make it

Oh! and what Mainje means when she says "her mothers crown" that just refers to there horns/top of the head.

(c) Mappley
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Comments: 60

LABINNAK In reply to ??? [2010-03-09 03:04:49 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much for the critique!! I will definitely take that into consideration!

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Leopardshadow97 In reply to LABINNAK [2010-03-09 21:54:33 +0000 UTC]

No problem ~ I love your stuff, I can't really be harsh on it.

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Mininno [2017-03-26 17:03:43 +0000 UTC]

fgdougjdi  

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RaucousRufus [2010-10-16 02:50:12 +0000 UTC]

AMAZING

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Starcraft3000 [2010-10-06 20:32:03 +0000 UTC]

amazing work

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SingsWithRavens [2010-10-02 03:00:13 +0000 UTC]

A beautiful design and story.

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Inner73eauty [2010-09-15 19:59:26 +0000 UTC]

Brilliant.

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CherryshMe [2010-08-04 06:02:42 +0000 UTC]

Awesome art~! Love the coloring and the creature! C:

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LABINNAK In reply to CherryshMe [2010-08-04 15:52:01 +0000 UTC]

thank you!

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snowhiskers [2010-07-07 12:18:41 +0000 UTC]

great emotions and colors, I love how Mainjs's tail curls around her mothers leg and both positions
You're a really good writer too, incorporating background details with what's going on at the moment

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Arylia [2010-04-26 01:41:15 +0000 UTC]

That looks so epic!
Don't worry, your writing is fine ^^
Just one note, on the last line 'there waiting for you.' It should be they're c:
I really like the intricate patterns on your drawings, the background is very epic as well <3

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Spottedfire94 [2010-04-16 08:50:19 +0000 UTC]

Wow this is actually...awesome O: the background is amazing! <3

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vriskaa [2010-04-16 01:08:26 +0000 UTC]

So amazing!

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Rikky-Bubbles [2010-04-05 21:07:45 +0000 UTC]

Oh wow, they`re beautiful

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LINX1595 [2010-03-15 20:52:11 +0000 UTC]

very VERY interesting story so far, id love to hear more.

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Moonflight-RiverClan [2010-03-13 22:34:23 +0000 UTC]

=OOOOOO
It's so awesome!! I absolutely love these creatures!

I love the poses, Mainje just looks so cute! <33

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SpottehThePieMonster [2010-03-13 18:24:48 +0000 UTC]

aww c:

your art's always so amazing, you're so talented! And the story's nice too, you're a great writer ^^

did you use the pen tool to draw the outline? I could never draw the lines so smooth

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LABINNAK In reply to SpottehThePieMonster [2010-03-13 22:42:10 +0000 UTC]

I only used the pen tool for the tail and thanks!

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SpottehThePieMonster In reply to LABINNAK [2010-03-13 22:45:52 +0000 UTC]

ah, cool c:

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MissBloodySunday13 [2010-03-13 11:21:16 +0000 UTC]

lovely^^

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Anandahbee [2010-03-11 02:47:35 +0000 UTC]

absotootly cutiefull!

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Isill-wolf [2010-03-10 22:32:55 +0000 UTC]

Good story and great art!!

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Ali-C-05 [2010-03-10 16:23:58 +0000 UTC]

wow! I really like this! And the story is gripping too XD

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Bubblestorm12 [2010-03-09 01:30:30 +0000 UTC]

This is so cool! I always love your work!

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shadowwolf4 [2010-03-09 01:26:54 +0000 UTC]

awwwz...so cute! good job!

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SummerScroll [2010-03-08 22:16:21 +0000 UTC]

Dawwww little Mainje be soo cute!

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Stonekill [2010-03-08 20:48:43 +0000 UTC]

The detail is amazing
I love your backgrounds
yu should make a tutorial for them

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Rosenezz [2010-03-08 20:04:24 +0000 UTC]

REALLY cool!

For some reason it reminds me of the Land Before Time o.o heh... XD

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LABINNAK In reply to Rosenezz [2010-03-08 22:11:01 +0000 UTC]

xD

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Rosenezz In reply to LABINNAK [2010-03-09 01:11:55 +0000 UTC]

xD

Really good though!

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suppari [2010-03-08 19:04:30 +0000 UTC]

AWWW ^^
THAT'S SOO ADORABLE X'33
I JUST LOVE HOW YOU DREW THESE THINGS O__O
SO DETAILED AND AMAZING <33
AND THIS IS WONDERFUL ^O^
I LOOVE THAT BG AND POSES AND EVERYTHING ^^
REALLY BRILLIANT WORK

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LABINNAK In reply to suppari [2010-03-08 22:11:24 +0000 UTC]

THANK YOU

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suppari In reply to LABINNAK [2010-03-09 19:46:59 +0000 UTC]

NO PROBLEM

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ice-or-fire [2010-03-08 18:39:28 +0000 UTC]

cute, looks great! I like the colors and their poses.

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PhoPhoDrago [2010-03-08 16:51:17 +0000 UTC]

Not only a great picture, but a great story as well.
I absolutely adore this creature design.

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Aspenfrost [2010-03-08 15:52:31 +0000 UTC]

awww!!! this is so cute. oh and i know a way to show emotion.
many creatures show emotion by body laungage.

anger - animals arch their backs ruffle their fur or somthing... anything to make them look bigger. THese creatures can do the same. lashing of tails and position of ears or the head is also another way.

Sad- a lowered head and tail... very small shape. Slouched. lowered ears.

Happieness- wagging tail, aleart face, even somthing small as the shape of eyes can change the expression.


you dont need to show facial expression to show emotion. do a little reserch in to different animals and their body language. hope this helps a bit.

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LABINNAK In reply to Aspenfrost [2010-03-08 22:13:12 +0000 UTC]

thank you for the tips!!

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Aspenfrost In reply to LABINNAK [2010-03-09 02:48:14 +0000 UTC]

no problem

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Jigsaw-x [2010-03-08 12:56:24 +0000 UTC]

I have to say one of the things about you being such a good artist is that you pay attention to details! I am so impressed with the mud on the feet. <3 I love muddy feet xD

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LABINNAK In reply to Jigsaw-x [2010-03-08 13:23:54 +0000 UTC]

lmao thank you! 8D

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Jigsaw-x In reply to LABINNAK [2010-03-08 17:27:04 +0000 UTC]

No prob XP

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Badgerstar930 [2010-03-08 11:54:24 +0000 UTC]

wow! Ur really really good with backrounds and stuff!!!!!:0

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Jayflop [2010-03-08 09:42:04 +0000 UTC]

This is so cool! Ypu could like, draw a comic or write a story, if you do I'd definatly read it ^^

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LABINNAK In reply to Jayflop [2010-03-08 13:20:19 +0000 UTC]

I was thinking about that with these creatures, but ... how would I be able to show there emotions with a face like that xD

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Jayflop In reply to LABINNAK [2010-03-08 23:29:43 +0000 UTC]

i don't know, in the corner onf the panel do a face expression 8|
xD lol

Well ur Mappley, you always figure things out :3

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LABINNAK In reply to Jayflop [2010-03-09 00:06:21 +0000 UTC]

xD

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Jayflop In reply to LABINNAK [2010-03-09 07:15:08 +0000 UTC]

:3






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orcacat88 [2010-03-08 03:59:06 +0000 UTC]

i love your Ayderuses aliens are awesome
you should write a story about this krista! i would read it! this sounds interesting ;D

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LABINNAK In reply to orcacat88 [2010-03-08 13:21:41 +0000 UTC]

Once I figure out have to make them have expression xD because of there face its hard to do lmao

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orcacat88 In reply to LABINNAK [2010-03-08 21:40:30 +0000 UTC]

haha yea xD

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