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I definitely like the colours in this comic, it's nice to see thought put into the background. It makes for a more in-depth reading experience.
Some times of improving on this colourful and interesting comic would be:
-Add lines of movement. It helps carry the eye more. It will help create contrast between his running and stopping.
-Ensuring that the direction of a character is easy to follow. Comics are a linear, 2D art form. So, what you see is what readers will understand. He's running right in panel 2, and is facing left in panel 3. It's not completely unreadable, it's just important to make things as clear as possible for your readers. Any disruption in story flow breaks the magic spell of immersing your reader.
-Avoid tangents. in panel 4, the character's nose is completely touching the speech bubble. I am going to just link to an article on it if you're wanting to see what tangents are and why they cause problems for artists.
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I like the use of panels in your comic here and the vibrance of colours. The text is pretty easy to read, which is very important. Good job!
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Thank you. I've been trying to improve on my comic backgrounds.
So by line movement you mean like the little motion lines you see in cartoons?
I know I messed up on that tangent, I'll try to avoid those in the future.
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I love the art and the paneling was done well to where I can read and follow it clearly.
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Awesome. That's what I'm going for.
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You totally nailed it. Keep it up.
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Your style is simple and easy to follow. You have accomplished a great skill of a comic artist. In the first 2 panels you see a guy running in the wood and suddenly in the third panel it turns out he is chasing someone. He's a bad guy. You can improve it and make that impression by changing the first 2 panels.
You change days in every page but I cannot see much happening each day. This is a little turn-off for a reader, don't you think? I think you can polish this up and make it a lot better. 
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I'm glad the art was effective in this page. I tried to do the spotted shading you'd get under a tree and I was a little worried the characters would be hard to see.
By "change days" do you mean the time in between updates? It's because a single comic page takes much longer than the average illustration due to the large size and the fact that's it's basically multiple illustrations on a single page. If you're talking about time change in the comic itself, that's because there was some portal hopping, as well as a time skip.
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I meant time in the story. Okay.
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Well, it was night when Aaron was knocked unconscious, and then his kidnappers had to drive for some time to get to their dungeon. When they went through the portal they were probably also in a different timezone, like how you'd be in a different time zone if you traveled from Texas in North America to Paris, France.
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Oh, it was kind of confusing but now it makes sense now that you have explained it. Thanks
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glad I could get that cleared up. maybe I'll have some dialogue explaining that
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