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iwtbaww [2010-07-14 01:00:34 +0000 UTC]
if you listen to The Funeral - Band Of Horses, she -dammit!- the part with Em dead is accented nicely
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Leonca [2010-06-06 19:23:54 +0000 UTC]
Wow, I think this was the best chapter yet as far as pacing and building up the environment the characters are in. For example, the way he is still thinking of his loss while also registering that someone is approaching- very emotional.
I also like how you managed to make Seth especially scary in this one. It is as if he has finally been forced to grow up from a little happy-go-lucky pup, and is now a force to be reckoned with.
Hmm, I am guessing his parents died because they didn’t have time to shift in the crash? If werewolves are that vulnerable in their human forms that would be a scary weakness.
I think this is a typo (shift from first person narrative)
Acevedo was the only person Seth could detect for miles
One thing I am still curious about is what Emmalee and Ryan were doing out there in the first place. I have an idea, but I’m not sure if it’s correct.
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stokeman [2010-06-05 22:33:33 +0000 UTC]
Mmm Hmmm, a mercenary- were is definitely not something you wanna tangle with....
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AuroraWolff [2010-06-02 01:48:49 +0000 UTC]
Can't wait for the next chapters. Looks like things are really going to get good soon.
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AuroraWolff In reply to lazywolf [2010-06-03 02:41:25 +0000 UTC]
Well I like this story so of course I will fav every chapter.
Keep up the good work man!
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jmillart [2010-05-29 19:22:44 +0000 UTC]
I think the climax is just around the corner!
Brilliantly done!
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ChoasSeraph123 [2010-05-29 13:43:52 +0000 UTC]
im still wroking on that pic i did for you im going to have to find someway of doing it on my compthere here at home and not in school as im runnin gout of time ><
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AKATP [2010-05-29 03:07:52 +0000 UTC]
Great interlude chapter, really sets the mood for the next one. And I guess the enemy of my enemy is my friend eh? Maybe Seth and Acevedo will become like Capt. Price and Soap.
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AKATP In reply to lazywolf [2010-05-29 14:36:06 +0000 UTC]
Yeah it's a Call of Duty reference. They don't hate each other at all, in fact Capt. Price could be looked at like Soap's mentor. The reason I said it is because (not to give to much away) at the end of MW2 Soap and Price go rogue and start kicking some serious ass.
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munchies-wolf [2010-05-28 21:06:19 +0000 UTC]
DUDE! That's pretty BA. that was a great piece of literature to take my mind off of the real world for a second
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XenoFrobe In reply to lazywolf [2010-05-29 00:07:05 +0000 UTC]
Same reason I write too. I can't understand people who would want to write about ordinary day-to-day stuff. That's also the reason I like reading your stuff.
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dogboy09 [2010-05-28 18:24:06 +0000 UTC]
Finally, Seth has a friend (maybe - although I think it's too late for the guy to change his mind). What I want to know is why Harper has a vendetta against werewolves . Grrr...
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PizzaWolf [2010-05-28 17:23:29 +0000 UTC]
hmmm...acevedo...i dont trust him. it feels like a setup, how is he the only other guy with access to the high security lunchbox? b/c he was in from the beginning...now just a change of heart. i smell skullduggery. the peices are in motion. can seth really kill Harper? will Acevedo really keep his bargin? CH11 seth moves to check harper...but is it checkmate? time will tell TUNE IN NEXT WEEK FOR THE NEXT EPISODE OF: SETH THE WEREWOLF WONDER...SAME WOLF TIME, SAME WOLF CHANNEL.
mwahahaha...i love it..you've improved since you started i think. you just keep drawing me in. if i have any input...expand the echos of the nightmare a bit more. i think you could make it hit a little harder, but if you're satisfied with it keep working on the next chapter. i loved the seth's confrontation with Acevedo. picturing him circling slowly listening. and ESPECIALLY the third to last paragraph to the end. the way you had it all came together...I LUVITT...
keep up the awesome.
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XenoFrobe [2010-05-28 16:09:09 +0000 UTC]
Yay! Moar!
Oh, dang. Wow. This is getting dark. Interesting. Your story has changed direction a lot since you started. I'm really curious to see where it's going now.
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lazywolf In reply to XenoFrobe [2010-05-28 23:22:36 +0000 UTC]
Getting darker eh? It's definitely pushing Seth to the limit as we get to see his true character. After all, what are morals and strengths if they never get put to the test? Question is: will he let the pain and anger overtake him and make him something he doesn't want to be, or will he end up doing what's right in the end?
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XenoFrobe In reply to lazywolf [2010-05-29 00:23:48 +0000 UTC]
I like tests of character. There are certain little moments that I love to read in books, and that's on the list. Also on the list are reveals of identity, discovery of identity, and werewolves fighting. Hence, my literary interest in werewolves.
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GingaTokkyu In reply to lazywolf [2010-05-29 00:17:27 +0000 UTC]
Yep, he is! Who on earth that wanted to kill a werewolf or make it into some crazy experiment anyway?
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whitespirit97 [2010-05-28 12:49:17 +0000 UTC]
good idea to have the guy approach him. pretty good chapter all in all. poor seth, harper killed almost everyone he loved...
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