Comments: 72
Davy123321 [2011-07-31 22:05:34 +0000 UTC]
You know what I like about this story? The fact that poeple actually died, people he was close with. Most stories involve them magically surviving everything.
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lazywolf In reply to Davy123321 [2011-07-31 22:10:35 +0000 UTC]
Thanks! Yeah, although Seth certainly wasn't very happy with the situation, I figure it makes the story better and more interesting if a main character doesn't make it.
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Rydrake011 [2011-06-08 20:49:55 +0000 UTC]
Awesome story! But one thing I hate more than a ending is a good story that's unfinished.
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lazywolf In reply to Rydrake011 [2011-06-09 06:08:39 +0000 UTC]
Thanks.
Otherwise, just don't seem to have it in me to finish the last chapter right now. Not that it's especially complex, just that I can't make it work the way I want, so then I just stop and put it off. Maybe someday it will come together.
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xxXlovewolvesXxx [2011-06-04 23:15:24 +0000 UTC]
this whole story is coming on great ^_^ ................ but it is quite sad D: good and sad all at the same time.
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AlphaWolf57 [2011-04-12 16:48:12 +0000 UTC]
Awsome story, your really good at this, since your an expert on this coukld you check out my werewolf story that i'm begining, if you can, thanks
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DRA3-NER0 [2011-02-18 11:29:17 +0000 UTC]
This was an awesome read, aswell as all the previous chapters. And i got a suggestion, try and see if you can get this published into a small novel or something, you might make a bit of money and it might make people realise you dont need vampires in every single story.
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lazywolf In reply to DRA3-NER0 [2011-02-20 10:20:54 +0000 UTC]
Glad you enjoyed the read. As for publishing, that's probably not going to happen (though I may pay to have some copies made for those interested).
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AudeS [2011-02-10 21:10:41 +0000 UTC]
I read the whole story till here. I loved reading it. The story was lighthearted at the beginning, but turned out even sader than I imagined. However, I'm glad that Harper has died. He was just a foolish bas**rd in my eyes.
But it's still sad. Seth's beloved died and her parents will surely be sad about the deaths of their children.
And of course Jack. He can't return to his former life. So, he has to start a new life somehow.
So, I will be waiting for the Epilouge. Even if I have to wait till the end of time.
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juju712 In reply to lazywolf [2013-10-30 21:50:16 +0000 UTC]
Yes, this change in atmosphere really got me there, usually I'm good to foresee events in a story.
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AudeS In reply to lazywolf [2011-02-18 22:23:07 +0000 UTC]
You are welcome.^^
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valko89 [2011-01-11 09:33:19 +0000 UTC]
So is this the end of the story or while there be more, pls say more.
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SethFharlay [2010-12-24 00:32:40 +0000 UTC]
OH!! How did I miss this in my inbox?? Curses....
[Done Reading]
Anyway, let me just say this: W-O-W.
At last we learn the action taking place under the table! And FINALLY that Harper, that ba-BEEEEP- Got what he deserved! Pretty ironic, in that he dies in the way that he killed Seth's father.
And Seth, now. Poor wolf. At least everything's come to terms. Wonder what he'll do now, and what of Jack? What'll happen to him? Oh, the loose ends; A plenty there are.
Absolutely fantastic job here, Celestial. Seth's story has been an amazing journey to take, and I can't wait to finish it. Many howls from me. And Zeus, too.
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FireFlasch [2010-12-20 08:10:53 +0000 UTC]
This story is amazing. I love to read it again and again. Can't wait for the next part [link]
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DWDruid [2010-12-20 03:18:21 +0000 UTC]
How fitting that the last werewolf Harper killed, was himself! You know, I always expected that the reason Harper hated them so much was because one did something to him long ago and he wanted revenge againist the entire race. I wasn't expecting the whole 'your an abomination! your a disease! your a freak of nature!" BS, it really shows how evil he truly is. Man this chapter got me so high on adrenaline, I can't even type straight! Screw the novel, this would make the best screenplay!
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Leonca [2010-12-15 05:25:26 +0000 UTC]
This was a good action-packed climax. I like how the details you include help to visualize the story, especially gruesome stuff like the hip replacement being forced out of Harper’s body or the way they killed the boy by running over him. Poor kid.
Found a typo-
I had to make sure to keep him in sight because he was familiar with the building knew the way out.
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Leonca In reply to lazywolf [2010-12-16 23:30:16 +0000 UTC]
His beliefs may have come across as a bit stereotypical for this genre of story, but he was still well written. I especially liked how quickly he made up his mind that he could not live with being a werewolf. You sure don’t see many villains lead the heroes in a desperate chase scene as they try to commit suicide.
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ChoasSeraph123 [2010-12-14 19:26:43 +0000 UTC]
=o i love this i was so into it XD
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WoofyArcticwolf [2010-12-14 00:47:15 +0000 UTC]
*wails at the thought of Seth ending*
YES! yes,yes,yes! Another chapter! And an action packed one at that! Good to see Harper getting his just reward, and that Seth is still alive. Hope Jack finds a way to atone for his own mistakes, and that maybe, just maybe, we'll see the return or replacement of Emallee for Seth. *flees angry mob of Seth fans who think Emallee is the only one for Seth*
As far as military stuff goes, I'd be wary of chosing any particular sub-machine gun unless you specify what exact cartridge it uses. Most submachine guns are 9mms, and although they can be upgraded to armor piercing, the 9mm round itself isn't nearly as strong as the .40 or .45, and especially not as strong or penetrating as armor piercing .45. I'd say either specify what the actuall round is, or replace "mp5" for a gun that typically uses a larger round. And for keeping Harper's info limited to him, I'm pretty sure he would have superiors or peers who would at least have a general idea of what he was doing. I can't remember his exact position, but anyone short of the president has to answer to someone else, and sometimes that superior is the president himself. Did Harper have any superiors? If not, how so? If he did, then how didn't they know what he was doing, or have a general clue as to what he was doing? I'm not trying to condemn or criticize(negatively), just trying to help.
Nice man, glad to see you've finaly wrapped it up. So good, and so believable, its been my favorite werewolf story here on DA. This story is actually what motivated me to write my own, and I'm sure many other stories were made possible because of your example. Thanks for sharing man, hope all goes well for you!
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lazywolf In reply to WoofyArcticwolf [2010-12-14 05:07:39 +0000 UTC]
Glad you liked it! Yeah, I'm glad Harper is finally out of the way as well. As for Jack, the epilogue should describe how he fares. As for Em, you'll just have to see.
As for the type of machine gun, I'll probably just change that part. Others have pointed out the same things, and even though the MP5 can handle bigger rounds than the 9, and even though armor-piercing rounds are made in handgun calibers, all it does is just distract from the story.
As for Harper having superiors, he does; it's just that any operations he ran against Seth were documented incorrectly in his paper work and were done as if they were just training missions. That, and he only ran the missions when he was sure no superiors would be around. The men that went on them had no idea what they were up against until they saw Seth.
Anyway, thanks! I'm very flattered that this is your favorite werewolf story on here.
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Sharpe19 In reply to lazywolf [2010-12-15 11:53:52 +0000 UTC]
Lol yeah. I've been wanting Seth to tear Harpers throat out but I like his demise a bit better.
Anything to change... I can't really think of anything off the top of my head. It looks great!
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CCS-Mascots [2010-12-13 22:10:12 +0000 UTC]
Yay! Harper got what he deserved!
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lazywolf In reply to CCS-Mascots [2010-12-14 04:11:36 +0000 UTC]
Sure did. Best part of all; Harper killed himself off so Seth didn't have to have his blood on his hands (paws).
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Jacques-Chat [2010-12-13 20:44:26 +0000 UTC]
Great job! I really enjoyed it. It was very believable.
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lazywolf In reply to Jacques-Chat [2010-12-14 04:10:15 +0000 UTC]
Good, I always try to aim for making the story as believable as possible. Thanks for reading.
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