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lilnutta10 — Animal I Have Become
Published: 2012-09-05 10:43:17 +0000 UTC; Views: 497; Favourites: 4; Downloads: 3
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Imprisoned in your own delusions,Created by the chaotic tornados
Wreaking havoc upon your thoughts.
Rage destroys what you used to be,
Sweet. Kind. Loved. All gone.
This rage controls you now.
A broken form faces the hanging mirror,
It's matster has been hidden for an eternity.
She cannot recognize herself. Myself?
She mimicks my heavy breathing and trembling form.
She is mocking me. She hates me. Everyone else does.
Smashing the girl's image staring back at me,
The rush from my hand is a narcotic,
It soothes my fury as the glass cries ruby tears.
A multicoloured butterfly fluttering across my wrist,
Your name written underneath,
Its message soon drowns in a velvet waterfall dripping from my hand.
Shards of glass ripping the skin on my knuckles more,
Each one a memory longing to be suppressed.
I look to my surroundings,
Vision becoming distorted
A swirl of metal becomes my focus point
Its icy touch sends a chill through me.
Gripping it in my bloody hands,
I open the door to the world before me,
Preparing to unleash my wrath on those who have hurt me.
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Comments: 18
It just took me a month to get this far through my inbox...
And bah, id say your writing is as good, if not better than ever
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Thank you very much old chap 
How have you been ?
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Your welcome chapette ^^
Not bad, kinda busy for various reasons, hench taking me so long to get through my messages xD
What about yourself?
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Im doing well old bean
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Ah now that is good to hear my dear ^^
Im 22 and id hardly call myself grown up you know 
But yeah, been neglecting it myself, mostly cause i got into the habit of going online during the evenings, but as i work at a bar 4 nights a week, its cut my time down a lot
And how about a summary of the last few months for you then?
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Ah nice
These past months i've been applying for lots of jobs and going on interviews, whilst learning to drive in my spare time 
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Not during the day, it has been pointed out i could potentially manage a day job while doing 2 or 3 of those shifts, but id have no free time and would rather do as few bar shifts as possible then
Ah lucky, i just never hear back when i apply, need to start up again actually, been getting my cv vamped up and all :3
Also need to learn to drive, shame no one, myself included, trusts me in a car
So i mostly have games to keep me busy between stuff, atm its borderlands 2 :3
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Very visual and visceral. I enjoyed it very much.
2 things you might want to look at: in the second stanza, you say "recognized" when I think you meant "recognize"
and in the last stanza you say "a swirl of metallic" when it should probably be "metal". Metallic isn't a noun, but you put it where the noun should be.
Easy enough fixes, if they suit you. Otherwise, great job!
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Thanks very much
And thanks for the fav
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The time spent away from writing hasn't diminished your talent at all
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Thank you
And thank you for the favourite
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