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Imjustheretoreadmfic [2015-02-03 08:02:48 +0000 UTC]
Finally, a story about pregnancy--or more accurately, a series of stories, since I've read every one before this as well--that doesn't include sexual activities in any kind of way. The writers seem to think that adding sex to maiesophilliac-literature (is that even a thing? Oh well, I just made it one) spices it up in some way or another. What they seem to fail to realize is that for maiesophilliacs like myself, the pregnancy in itself is enough to get my blood pumping. A description of a huge, taut belly is just what I desire and you sir have provided me with that. *clap, clap, clap.* If I had one complaint about this story, it would be that the characters aren't fleshed out enough. Beyond Charlie's fetish, we don't know that much about her. And, even though she despises the way her brother Jon's treats her, personality-wise, she doesn't appear to be any different. I won't get into the complaints all that much because this is a great story and I wouldn't want to discourage you from it in any way. I can't believe I purposefully avoided this for the four or five months I've been on DA because I thought it was mpreg.
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Imjustheretoreadmfic In reply to LyzeOD [2015-02-04 04:00:59 +0000 UTC]
I understand man. Character development is pretty hard to write. That's why in most sitcoms the characters stay the same season after season; even professional writers have a hard time making changes to a character. I would like to see her change at some point, though. Whenever you get around to it.
Yeah lol. Charlie isn't used as a unisex name often, but I'm glad the protagonist is a girl.
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Bighouston [2014-06-26 20:17:47 +0000 UTC]
Really enjoyed the updates! One of my favorite reads in this genre of all time! Are you working on more (near future)?
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LyzeOD In reply to Bighouston [2014-06-27 14:36:43 +0000 UTC]
Yes, there will be another soonish.
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Rach-rachie [2014-06-21 18:41:44 +0000 UTC]
Oh my gosh. I loved it! This series was my first preggo read and by far my favorite. You made my day writing more! I can't wait to see what having a male sharing her fetish will bring!!!! You rock!
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timebomber427 [2014-06-19 01:42:47 +0000 UTC]
Seeing as there's the mention of quints here, I'm guessing she's going to see how many she can hold just to test it out with Derrick?
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Gunnousai [2014-06-15 06:10:47 +0000 UTC]
cool
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A-hardie [2014-06-13 04:59:52 +0000 UTC]
To quote Rajesh 'the plot like my gravy thickens'
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formlessdream [2014-06-11 02:36:43 +0000 UTC]
To quote Starfire: Glorious!
A strange thought, has charlie tried to borrow pregnancies from electronic sources like a security cam or internet stream? It just seems limited to line-of-sight.
Looking forward to the next parts.
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LyzeOD In reply to formlessdream [2014-06-11 03:11:40 +0000 UTC]
I had actually thought about stealing through devices but opted out of it. It's not limited to line of sight though, just a certain range and clear knowledge of what you're after. That came up in Rules.
For odd use of abilities through electronics though, Larry Niven (sci-fi writer of Ringworld and creator of the Man-Kzin war series) had a sci fi detective series with a protagonist that had a very minor telekinetic talent. He had telekinesis with a range of exactly the length of one of his arms but could only exert a couple pounds of force with it. He could however feel with it like it was an actual arm. The part that ties into with the electronics is that he could reach through a viewscreen and touch someone at the other end, provided that from his perspective the other person was at about arm's reach. In one of the stories he was searching for a body dumped somewhere outside of the lunar colony so used the command center's real time holodisplay from a satellite to 'sweep' the terrain with his telekinesis until he felt where the body was. I had thought that was a pretty cool concept when I first read it.
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SpoilersSport In reply to LyzeOD [2014-06-21 01:27:28 +0000 UTC]
GIL HAMILTON OF ARM! GIL HAMILTON OF ARM! Daaaman fine Book.
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relinquish23 [2014-06-11 00:49:12 +0000 UTC]
Just wanted to say this is probably one of my favourite series. All of your characters are fairly unique, it's a fun read in spite being sort of fetishy. Looking forward to more in the future.
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Majin83 [2014-06-10 08:04:44 +0000 UTC]
Wow...very nice.
It has been so long I had thought this story series was done with and we just had the 3 gems before. Now it is really wonderful!
I am very curious how Derrick's knowledge will make things more interesting...what ideas will our new hero has.
btw, you did have 1 small error on this part:
Derrick shrugged, “Well that’s not so bad, gets her of your hair.”
should there be an 'out' between 'her' and 'of'?
Derrick shrugged, “Well that’s not so bad, gets her 'out' of your hair.”
hope that helped.
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LyzeOD In reply to Majin83 [2014-06-10 10:52:11 +0000 UTC]
Oops, I'll fix it.
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DresdenQ [2014-06-10 03:35:58 +0000 UTC]
I love this series! welcome back!
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LyzeOD In reply to DresdenQ [2014-06-10 10:52:26 +0000 UTC]
Thank you.
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RiddleAugust [2014-06-10 01:30:21 +0000 UTC]
"Hnng" indeed, Derrick! I'm right there with ya!
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RiddleAugust In reply to LyzeOD [2014-06-10 01:44:51 +0000 UTC]
Welcome back! This story series is one of my favorites!
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