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Published: 2004-03-20 04:15:27 +0000 UTC; Views: 125; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 47
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BruisesEverywhere on me they're there.
They double everyday,
Growing bigger and darker.
No one knows my little secret,
Of how I beat my self at night.
I donβt even know anymore,
I feel no pain.
The only thing thatβs there to prove,
Is the ever multiplying and growing,
Dark purple and blue
Spots all over my body.
Where the clothes will always cover,
The bruises remain.
By: MandaLynn
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Comments: 5
this is a really interesting idea! i dig it.
in the first line though, it should be "they're" not "their".
random little insight:
i have very itchy skin, and when i was younger i used to scratch my legs in my sleep so hard that i would take off skin in big long lines up and down my calves...and i wouldn't even realize it until i saw them the next day.
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thank u for noting that miss type. i had kicked my self one night and then some one at my school the next day saw it before me and turned my dad in for child abuse, it was really interesting thing to have to explain. but the good thing was my dad didn't getin trouble. cus he didn't do it.
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You seem to have a talent for description. It's such a deep and depressing subject that seems like a guilty confession.... you presented it well.
CC- It's a good poem, but broaden your vocabulary a little to inhance the detail. You are obviously good with words, so certainly this could become a great poem with some revision.
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thank you. i'll work on it. *pulls out a dictionary and stars looking*
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