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Let me first start by saying this is my first Critique... and your art is beautiful!!!! I love how the whole drawing is put together and how all the colors go together!!!My favorite part of this drawing has to be the colors you chose!! The yellow, pink, orange go beautifully together and the green with all those flowers!!! I have to ask though.... why does she not have a cutie mark?? Other than that, keep on with what your doing!!!! I'm looking forward to seeing other awesome, amazing art that makes all your watchers nevousexited.... I hope i spelled right!!
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Thanks ^^ The pic is still a WIP though
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No problem^^
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Now, what can I say?
Another wonderful drawing from MelodySArtist. Now, I'm going to write a critique ( as always, except for my first one ) depending on how the helpdesk describes as of what a critique is, so before getting surprised on my rating, please read everything I write carefully, or this: help.deviantart.com/95/
Anyways, let's start off, shall we?
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Vision: To be honest with you, I'm not sure if I can exactly understand the idea or theme behind this deviation, not at the moment to say the least. While it could've been just a random thing, I still cannot imagine anything at the moment as of what could this picture represent. From the backround, I could imagine something with freedom if the sun is rising, or escaping if it's getting late maybe...? I'm also not sure, because there are clouds, which... Somewhy reminds Me of when a storm is coming, but it just might be Me. However, it still is a great drawing, and I myself would gladly buy it as well, I'm just not sure what could I do with it.
Originality: I cannot say this art style is any new or fresh, or that I haven't seen it before ( because you know... I watch you... ), but overall for yourself as the artist it is really unique. Now honestly, I'm not sure if it surprises Me... maybe one thing, and that is, that you combinate lineless and normal style. I mean, the body is lineless, but the hair clearly have lines, and the eyes are there, so same thing for that. But hey, it just makes it look more unique and cool. So yeah.
Technique: I'm not sure if I should say professional knowing you'll reject Me saying that, but in my opinion, this turned out great. While Pinkamena doesn't really match the painting like background in my opinion, it still turned out just wonderful. The grass is just breath taking, however I'm kind of unsure about the sky. It confuses Me a little with the clouds, and I still cannot decide, is it getting late or is the sun getting up?
Or is there like a giant fire behind her? That could also make Me have a whole new point of view and change this whole critique, but ehh...
Impact: Except for being another amazing artwork, honestly it has no impact on Me, sorry. I think there is nothing else to say for this section.
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Mistakes In My Opinion: While I'm hating being nitpicky, this is a critique after all, and I just wanted to mention a few things that would be great to fix. Or, what bothers Me to say the least.
The first thing is, At the left side the grass seems to have a blueish aura around it, but starting from the middle that aura goes away, and it's not even blurred to seem like an effect on it, it's just clear it ends there, and in my opinion that looks a little ugly, but it might be Me. If it was done purposely though, let's ignore this, because it might be my taste.
As I mentioned, Pinkamena doesn't fit this background in my opinion, and now that I take a look at the flowers, it looks a little weird too, but hey, atleast you took your time and put a lot of effort in this, which is something to admire.
The clouds... One of them looks like lips, nothing else. They're just a little weird for Me, but I couldn't do better, so who am I to complain?
As of Pinkamena... While it is supposed to be a hibrid between a lineless and normal art, it does bother Me for example, that even though the hair seems to be balanced, in the tail it clearly can be seen that you kinda threw the lines in there to make the hair effect... I don't know, the tail bothers Me for some reason, doesn't look as good as the hair.
It also bothers Me that the backleg seems to have a line. I can legitly make it out, it's not the shading, there is a legit line around the backleg, and it annoys Me considering this is supposed to be lineart, however I'm not going to complain that much about it because I know SAI sometimes can be a pain in the ass with the shading, especially when you have millions of layers, even more with lineartwork.
As of the eye... It's perfect for Me, the eyelash seems to be the only thing bothering Me. It seems a little like you didn't even try to do an effect with it like making them ( eyelashes ) sharpy, just threw the pen tool there and drew the lines, and tried to make it look good with strongening the lines, but they seem a little bold for Me, but yet again, might be just Me.
Also I just can't help but notice that back front leg... First of all, it's pointy. Secondly, no matter how I look at it, not only didnt you continue it behind her hair, but no matter how I try to look at it with the body style, that frickin' leg is coming out of her hair, not her body.
Other than that, nothing else left that I could complain of... Maybe the fact that the hair and tail and muzzle is not the straightest / curliest I have ever seen, and that bothers my eye, but that could be part of your style, and if you used normal lines instead of lineartwork it's only to be expected that it won't be straight. If you used lineartwork, next time I'd recommend making the lines a little more nicer though.
Also, shading can be a pain in the ass I know, but you could've make it a little more soft. On her front leg, it kinda looks like she's made out of marzipan, she's plastic or she's having a potato-like "texture".
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And, that's it I think. While having some minor mistakes, I really love this drawing, and I could've pointed out things that I'm just nitpicky about, so yeah.
While the critique might seem bad, trust Me, I adore this drawing. I really do, it's just breath taking. And I'd recommend keeping up the good work! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h⦠" width="15" height="13" alt="
Trust Me, you might say you're not good, but some of us can only dream of drawing as good as you do. Never forget this.
And please, instead of getting upset about the mistakes part... Just move on, and learn from it. So the next time you fix those mistakes, you can be even more proud that you improved more with it. Always stay positive, alright? <3
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I have to say, this work is absolutely stunning. I have to start with the background. It's so... Original! The colours are blended into it well, and it dosent look like a blobby mess.
Now for the character... Pinkie/Pinkamena looks stunning. I love the lineless drawing and the shading! Her expression catches your attention and represents her Pinkamena personality.
The sparkles in the mane... Just... It fits perfectly into the picture. The lines going though the mane don't look messy, they fit perfectly into the image.
And the sky... It just looks so beautiful! The colours you chose go well for the background.
Overall, I'd buy this when it comes out as a print if I had the money. It'd have a good place on my wall XD
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Wow, this one is simply amazing, looks so wonderful and you add a lot of nice effects!
Her pose is very elegant and majestic, I really like how she looks with that lovely expression in her eyes!Β
And I really like how her hair shinning!Β
And the background is very pretty, you do great effect here and with wonderful colours!Β
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Thank you sooooo much ;O; I really don't know how to thank enoughΒ
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You're very very welcome dear! Β
You don't need to thanks to me so much, see that you appreciate my comment is enough to me!Β Β
Keep you pretty art, you're improving so much!Β Β Β
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This is so lovely ^^ 
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Thank you so much <33
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You're very welcome
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Thankies Ammy Senpai ;;
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how do you put the Critique thing on it?? if you dont mindΒ
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Sweet Celestia Melody, this looks amazing! Gooooooosh you're so good at backgrrrrrrrounds teach me your ways! O:
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;_; Thanks Senpai
Get Sai xD
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ooh this is really awesome!
You did another great job Melody <3
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Aaa thank you Senpai ;; And oh my Gosh, your Premium! Dx
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You're welcome! 
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Ahh, I see you fixed some mistakes I warned you about. x3
Now it really is perfect and breath taking Senpai x3
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I hope you don't mind that I critiqued it already
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Absolutely not! Thanks for the lovely critique ^-^
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No problem 
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