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Mikutashi β D Gray man: ER DOUJIN PAGE?
Published: 2008-12-14 05:25:40 +0000 UTC; Views: 35713; Favourites: 434; Downloads: 1507
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random page.Doujinshi practise.
FIRST POST IN A YEAR OR SOMETHING! WHOAAAZA
CRITICS PLEASE I WANNA IMPROVE
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Dayuuuuuuuummmmm!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This looks like it was drawn by Katsura!!!!! And Kanda is really an arse. OH WELL! at least he's hot!!! BTW... I love this! I hope you make more!!!
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Nice artwork! what is the name of the font u used and where can it be downloaded/found?
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LOL, and the DGM OST came on right as i clicked this. XD
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I think the boxes cut of alot of things, espicialy the bottom boxes because your missing deatil. More shading would be nice and you could try that you know. Good but I have problems following the bubbles but thats about it. Pretty good try for your first.
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personally i thought there wasnt much bout it that was wrong
but i guess if i do have to point somthing out it would be Kandas
kinda half profile
or maybe his neck?
i donno but the rest is fine...
i have a neck fetish XD
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this reminds me of that one scene in Harry Potter. O.o
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Ooh... well, honestly, I think Allen's hand in the first panel looks slightly awkward. The black around the "Shut up" seems a little too small, and, I dunno... I don't really like Allen's shocked face. But I really like how Kanda came out. His profile is quite nice. ^^
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wow you have really done this well. I have started watching D-Grayman and I definatly see the style here. perhaps you could do one with differently shaped panels.
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;_; Ahhh,it looks all professional and stuff. You own.
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youve copied d gray man very well
im not an expert
so i can see any smaller details
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Most of the problems I see are proportional, but nothing that doesn't improve on its own, even without critique.
But I need to point out the mirror. It has no depth, it only needs a bit of distinguishing to indicate distance.
Also, I know Kanda's posture is most commonly erect and I-has-dignity, but all necks lean forward slightly. It might also give a different, nice effect if you do it right (I'm sure you will).
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Other than what people have been saying i don't see anything wrong with it! ^^
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OMG you are alive. I love it a bigger shutup panel is all I can think of. Would love to find your new account but I am an army wife with lil time seeing my hubby just got back from Iraq. So Merry Christmas and keep up the stunningly amazing artwork of yours.
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I wanna read moar. D:
*totally giving you advanced critique*
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Oh wow. XD
You're art just seems to get more and more amazing.
-faves-
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wow, really great! Love your work and glad you're back, you were missed ^^
Oh yeah, well I can see the emotion within each panel and I can definetely see them acting this way with eachother, lovers or not XD anyway I'm not sure what advise I can really give to improve except to keep practicing, I know that wasn't really helpful but either way it's really good ^^
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aww, I miss D.Gray-Man so much without the recent updates.
As for critique, Allen looks a little strangely proportioned in the centre panel when he is looking in the mirror. That's all I have noticed though. I quite like the first shot of Kanda. Aaaah, I want more DGM T-T
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Alright! Well, I don't see any problems. Both the drawings and and tones are well done and the grammer ok. Not tomention the scene was very good. It flow thru the entire page. But just woundering why did you shade the speech ballons in the fourth panel?
That's it, and can you tell me what D Grey man about. I been woundering about the story.
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you mad! I'm waiting one year (or something) for something new your in that DA and only NOW you post!? I'm so.... HAPPY! OH FINALY ONE THING OF MIKUTASHI-SAMA!! *---*
AND ARE OF MY FAVORITE MANGΓ, D.GRAY-MAN! *0*
HOOORAY! \Γ΅/
*person completely stupid and happy*
sorry for my bad english D:""
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Er, I noticed that Kanda's face has a strange shape on the second pic...
But hey, your job is so awesome that it could have been from Katsura Hoshino...
Please, please, show us more of your work !! <3
Sorry for my poor english U.U
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Sweet, I like this page...Allen is adorable as always lol =3
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Gosh so professional looking u.u great job!
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Something about the bottom right panel seems a little off... I think it's the left side of Allen's face... and you had a slight grammar mistake, I think you meant, "I tried to ignore him when he first spoke to me"
Otherwise nice job.
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Awesome. Very good job. I don't know much about DGray Man, but I do know that your art is awesome. I've missed you.
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;__; It looks so professional.
Waaa yay it's been ages since we've heard from you!! >3<
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Great work!
But you need to correct the grammar and also Allen's arm at the 4 panel.
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* O * incredible, but is read from left to right? because the doujin is read from right to left XD, bye!
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Great page! It would be great if you turn this into a real doujinshi n_n
I love how you draw Allen and Kanda
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holy shit i love this manga DX
and as a critic, well i guess the angle of camera on character. but other than that its a ok! XD
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i thinkkkkk.
*finding a flaw*
maybe more detail on the allen's innocence hand.
but that's pretty much it.
o:
really goood.
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Kanda and Aleen look great. the only critique I could give is that it was a little hard to figure out who was talking
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*Trying to find a flaw*
They are too sexy to handle? : D ?
Is that a flaw?
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yey! it been sooo long! I would buy that from you! XD
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eh...You could add more details, more diffrent lvls of shading and more creases and folds in the clothing (you wanted critizium!)
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