TarantulaLdAmn [2011-12-30 02:25:50 +0000 UTC]
Caught my interest at once.
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The-True-Artist In reply to TarantulaLdAmn [2011-12-30 03:58:46 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! Any feedback? It's part of a trilogy I plan on writing.
TarantulaLdAmn In reply to The-True-Artist [2011-12-30 14:07:11 +0000 UTC]
Hmmm, the only thing I need to mention is that when someone utters a sentence, for example from the beginning: "Try to keep up." Asmund said coldly. I've been taught at school that after the quotation (") marks you do this: "Try to keep up", Asmund said coldly. If after that Asmund would keep talking, then you'd use the sentence-ending dot (.) within the quotation marks. I've seen others use the , within the quotation marks, but, well, in Finnish schools at least we're taught to use it right after. But this is the only thing that caught my eye while reading your text. Your story seems very very interesting and I am eager to know more of this. I too am trying to write a trilogy, so good luck to ya and stay strong!
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