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SinNightfall [2015-02-19 00:54:26 +0000 UTC]
Gotta say I'm really diggin this. its satisfying that sci-fi space adventure I been having lately.
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Uncle-Ben [2015-02-18 23:38:39 +0000 UTC]
Hey Wraith? I'm a little confused.
Obviously the characters don't know what happened and you, the author, have not revealed what happened, so I'm not asking what happened. However, since we don't see the closet before the change and only after the change is it described with large-ish words, I'm a little confused as to what happened to the closet. You describe it with hovering things and this:
"It's a BioWarp Mage station. And judging purely by the height of the podium and the size and distinct shape of the basins, one tailor-made for our new passenger."
What is that? And if it is tailor made for her, does that mean it is curvy like she is?
Could add a little more description or maybe dumb it down a little?
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MSFHWraith In reply to Uncle-Ben [2015-02-19 00:33:38 +0000 UTC]
You should be able to tell from context that it's some sort of podium for a biowarp mage to stand on. In theory, such a mage could channel energy into a ship's power supply with that.
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Uncle-Ben In reply to MSFHWraith [2015-02-19 05:55:00 +0000 UTC]
I'm sorry. Truly I am. I re-read the paragraphs and I've gotten past the pillar image that was in my head. Now I'm seeing a preacher's pulpit with extra arms to the sides. I'm feeling like I'm blind here trying to use my hands, for the first time, to figure this out.
There is nothing in my knowledge of what a BioMage is. Am I supposed to know? From an etymology standpoint, I think that is someone who manipulates living matter(?) or something. Biology was never my strong suit.
It feels like you are referencing something somewhere that I do not know.
Should I just go with it and assume whatever it is, it is?
I'm sorry for this.
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MSFHWraith In reply to Uncle-Ben [2015-02-19 07:44:24 +0000 UTC]
This was mentioned in previous chapters, I'm entirely sure of it. Earlier ships needed a living mage funneling magical energy into the engines to go faster than lightspeed. While modern ships can use batteries to replicate the mage(a then-needed biological component), the term BioWarp stuck to mean both faster-than-light travel and the jump to it, while some ships have equipment that allow specialized biowarp mages to increase power to a ship's systems.
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Uncle-Ben In reply to MSFHWraith [2015-02-19 16:08:43 +0000 UTC]
Thank you for this. Your explanation clears up a lot of my misunderstanding. I'll go back and re-read all the chapters again to fill in the rest. And thank you for being patient with me.
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MSFHWraith In reply to Uncle-Ben [2015-02-19 16:28:19 +0000 UTC]
No problem! Glad you're reading^-^
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MitchellTF [2015-02-18 17:19:25 +0000 UTC]
Very well done story. I like!
Also, yeah. We all know Kiki is doomed to eternal girlhood. I do like that they at least look into solutions.
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Sedra-the-Lime [2015-02-18 10:27:52 +0000 UTC]
I have a feeling Kiki will learn acceptance in her new body. Maybe last-second.
Oh, right. Good work, again!
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