Comments: 29
WildDaydreamer [2008-04-12 04:57:13 +0000 UTC]
What a paper!?
Honestly, anyone could of mistaken that Edgar Allen Poe could of written this himself.
You came out strongly and the fact that you described every action of "goldilocks" so well made the paper flow with strength and attention-grabbing awesomeness.
This is a great piece of work, and your diction with the words was truly remarkable.
I personally admire the way Poe rights, and it sometimes inspires some of my writings, but good mam, have totally blown me away.
^^
I shall proudly fav this, cause this is sumthing I want to read, over and over and over again.
The only thing I can say, is that you need to describe more of what Goldilocks is thinking before she eats the porridge. Alot of people might question as to why she did that, so you need a strong reason as to prove her reason of mind before she takes the poison.
TOTALLY LOVE THIS PAPER!
Love, Dreamer. ^^
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WildDaydreamer In reply to Nekoori [2008-04-14 23:33:31 +0000 UTC]
your welcomes, love.
This story totally made my day too.
^^
It was quite the thrill.
It totally made me want to go eat some porridge....without..poison..^^
yea...no poison is nice.
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WildDaydreamer In reply to Nekoori [2008-04-17 00:37:29 +0000 UTC]
*shrugs*
usually porridge is not poisoned where I'm from...
so I don't know about you guys....>_>
..
..
but then again...
we eat tofu rolls and crickets...
so...
I can't really say
>_<
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Nekoori In reply to Wowiie [2008-04-13 02:41:14 +0000 UTC]
Thanks so much Keisha !
My teacher really loved it. c:
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Nekoori In reply to Paw-BR [2008-04-13 02:42:10 +0000 UTC]
Thanks so much ! <33
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cat-nap [2008-04-11 05:24:04 +0000 UTC]
Two questions:
1. Why did the bears return home so quickly?
2. How did the girl forget that she had put the poison in the porridge?
Overall, you are a very good writer! You have a great vocabulary, as well! <3 I know you'll get a good grade. :]
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cat-nap In reply to Nekoori [2008-04-13 03:14:54 +0000 UTC]
1. DD:!
2. :000!
XDD;
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Gumidrop [2008-04-11 02:31:38 +0000 UTC]
whoaa.. ur a good writer ;c;
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gelertyfun4every1 [2008-04-11 02:24:36 +0000 UTC]
o.0
Wow! I love it. Whoever your teacher is better give you an A!!
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