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AkumuArtz [2016-06-11 07:27:27 +0000 UTC]
So let me get this straight
A virus is turning humans into pokemon through biting
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thescpcontainment [2015-09-09 21:03:52 +0000 UTC]
KETER World Class event,
Code: Black
info: in a event of a Keter event of a outbreak of the world all personnel will go underground to the████ ████
and seek shelter.
Team Delta will try to contain the outbreak and other teams will do reclaim major military bases from the ███████.
and experimental weapons are activate and in a event that fails nukes will be launched from missiles salvos and hit major citys all over the world.
█████████████████████████████████████████████████████████████████████████████████████████████████████
SCP Foundation.
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NoahtheDragon [2015-03-24 04:51:08 +0000 UTC]
This not even close too mature content take it off. I've seen worse with pokemon tf's without mature content this one isn't mature also great story!
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Theonemangroup02 [2014-06-06 20:16:45 +0000 UTC]
Nick's zombie survival plan... I give it a 11/10!
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Thebalrog6 [2011-04-30 06:18:56 +0000 UTC]
in a pokemon battle,i beat the stuffing out of my friend after i transformed into a sceptile.i used only one pokemon,my trusted grovyle(he was supposed to evolve into a sceptile but i evolved instead of it).my friend had all level 100 pokemon.he said"your going down."i yelled at him and said"i'll win this battle no matter what,even though you beat me 50 thousand times......"he said"well,good luck with that.NOT."i said"i heard that."i beat him and he said"what?WHAT?!how could you beat me?!i'm better than you at everything!i even turned you into a sceptile and your gf into a grovyle just to make you happy!"i was stunned and i said"you......you did this to me and my gf?!"he said"well,yeah!after all of my victories over you,i felt like you needed to need more joy in your life."i used bullet seed on him and grabbed his neck.i yelled"you are the most generous scientist a friend could have!and i love you for it."i was still feeling victorious after the battle and my gf came over.we double-battled against my friend and another pro pokemon trainer friend of mine.we beat them with only our grovyle and treecko.we are the best pokemon and pokemon trainers ever.
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nfjrrjf In reply to Jsekela77 [2010-10-18 22:19:04 +0000 UTC]
If I ever get the time, I certainly will. But it's hard to get a break. x.x
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Jsekela77 In reply to nfjrrjf [2010-11-30 02:43:06 +0000 UTC]
lemme know if you ever do. I want to keep reading this one.
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Gamer92 [2010-05-26 02:11:35 +0000 UTC]
This is quite interesting. At least summer is coming. (From where I live at least.)
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nfjrrjf In reply to Gamer92 [2010-05-26 20:54:42 +0000 UTC]
Thanks! ^^
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Nitrinoxus [2010-03-07 08:24:08 +0000 UTC]
A Pokémon Mystery Dungeon Fanfic, eh?
Heh... It looks like I might have some competition.
Nice work on Chapter 1. I look forward to seeing what else you do with this.
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nfjrrjf In reply to Nitrinoxus [2010-03-08 01:00:12 +0000 UTC]
Competition? Hardly...after getting that first chapter done, I got insanely busy. I haven't even started the second chapter. Hopefully, I'll be able to force myself to write the next chapter.
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Nitrinoxus In reply to nfjrrjf [2010-03-08 02:44:00 +0000 UTC]
Yeah, I know how that goes. Well, good luck on it!
If you get the time, check out my PMD story. It might help you in writing your story. It doesn't have the same apocalyptic opening yours does (which was VERY effective at grabbing my attention), but it does star a Blaziken named Ginji as the main protagonist.
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nfjrrjf In reply to Nitrinoxus [2010-03-08 03:11:47 +0000 UTC]
Yep; I'm already reading it. I loved how the first chapter introduced an element of suspense.
I can tell where you got Ginji from; it was the little miniseries of novels that were made for PMD's release. I enjoy the very high-tech nature of the story, too.
Of course, our stories are pretty much dissimilar. Whereas your story starts out rather happily and the characters are already highly experienced, the character in my story were mostly just thrown into circumstances. Mine...also will probably end up being very dark, if my current thoughts get written on paper.
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Nitrinoxus In reply to nfjrrjf [2010-03-08 03:46:28 +0000 UTC]
Yeah, I guess they don't have too much in common as of right now. However, after the next Chapter, I plan to make things quite a bit more sinister.
Just out of curiosity, how far have you read? I don't want to give anything away...
Personally, I'm a big fan of literary cliffhangers. Whenever I read a book, I judge how good it is on how much effort it takes to turn the page. If I have to force myself to keep reading, I put it down (unless it's an assignment...). Suspense always helps to keep the audience engaged, and that's exactly what I strive for with every chapter I crank out: to get someone hooked and pulled into the story.
Pardon if this sounds a bit nuts (or very nuts for that matter), but when I'm writing, it often feels as if I'm standing in the world I'm describing. Laugh if you must, but it's actually a really good way to pin down a description. It's much easier to talk about a place in any detail if you've been there to see it firsthand. Now I know that this is all fiction, but I try to think of it as a place out of my dreams that has a life of its own, yet doesn't exist.
But, hey, I'm completely bonkers.
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nfjrrjf In reply to Nitrinoxus [2010-03-09 02:54:38 +0000 UTC]
You aren't bonkers at all; in fact, that's what I do pretty much all the time when writing descriptions. I go over the event like I was actually in it. The tactic works even better in a dream - or a lucid dream - because it makes me feel like I am truly in the scene instead of observing it.
So far, I've only read the Prologue and Chapter 1. I plan to read Chapter 2-3 today, if I get the chance.
I do try to use suspense whenever possible, but I have a great deal of difficulty actually using it correctly. I'm much better at using parallelism, alliteration, and rhetoric.
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Nitrinoxus In reply to nfjrrjf [2010-03-09 03:26:36 +0000 UTC]
The thing about suspense is that you have to be careful not to overdo it. Just like anything else in literary art, it's a balancing act.
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nfjrrjf In reply to Desenganio [2009-12-08 03:21:10 +0000 UTC]
Thanks! ^^ It's always good to hear from readers. I still haven't gotten time to write the next section, but I hope to do it eventually.
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Desenganio In reply to nfjrrjf [2009-12-08 03:45:41 +0000 UTC]
Best of luck on that.
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jdpfeifer [2009-10-17 00:35:01 +0000 UTC]
this is an awesome story, i can't wait for the next one
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nfjrrjf In reply to jdpfeifer [2009-10-17 01:40:50 +0000 UTC]
Sadly, there's a good chance it'll be some time until the next one. I've been very, very busy lately.
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jdpfeifer In reply to nfjrrjf [2009-10-17 02:36:26 +0000 UTC]
it's okay u take ur time and do a good job ^.=.^
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TheAkula [2009-09-17 02:39:40 +0000 UTC]
Not bad, a few touches here and there could really make an already good story a great one!
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nfjrrjf In reply to TheAkula [2009-09-18 02:19:12 +0000 UTC]
Hmm...I might just take up that offer. ^^
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Gannon12345 [2009-08-13 04:26:28 +0000 UTC]
OMG! Those Tf's... so... detailed :nosebleed: losing conciousness
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nfjrrjf In reply to Gannon12345 [2009-08-13 14:35:10 +0000 UTC]
Hehee, glad you like it.
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nfjrrjf In reply to monchiken [2009-05-27 01:05:55 +0000 UTC]
I'm glad you like it. ^^
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monchiken In reply to nfjrrjf [2009-06-06 01:57:08 +0000 UTC]
You are quite welcome ;D !
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nfjrrjf In reply to Threehorn [2009-04-23 19:37:45 +0000 UTC]
I would, if I could just figure out a storyline that isn't directly copying the games. A dream can only take you so far, but hopefully I figure something out.
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Neo222 [2009-04-23 02:38:27 +0000 UTC]
Just call me Neo, please. XD
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nfjrrjf In reply to Neo222 [2009-04-23 02:39:47 +0000 UTC]
Fixed. Heh.
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