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Published: 2006-09-25 00:37:32 +0000 UTC; Views: 194; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 5
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Description Hearts that once were warm
Hearts that once were loved
Hears that once were emotional
Now are frozen stiff
Hearts that once were loving
Hearts that once laughed
Hearts that once smiled
Now sit motionless
Hearts that used to show compassion
Hearts that used to show remorse
Hearts that used to show mourning
Now don’t feel a thing
Not because they cant
Not because they are unable
But because they have been broken
And broken again and again
Until they stopped caring
And they stopped believeing
That they could
And would
Find happiness
In this world
That seems only to hurt
And hate
Them.
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Comments: 20

LittleSpiker05 [2006-09-30 02:38:32 +0000 UTC]

yays!! wonderfulness. when i think of this, i see someone sitting in a corner, no color, her eyes blank, just staring.

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not-so-unaffected In reply to LittleSpiker05 [2006-09-30 03:49:01 +0000 UTC]

yes that is a great image for this one

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ScorpioWaterAngel [2006-09-27 01:35:21 +0000 UTC]

That's sad.. Good poem.

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not-so-unaffected In reply to ScorpioWaterAngel [2006-09-27 02:13:00 +0000 UTC]

thanks. It was meant to be sad but something that truly does happen. Hopefully some eyes have been opened to the real world

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ScorpioWaterAngel In reply to not-so-unaffected [2006-09-28 10:52:36 +0000 UTC]

Yeah. Good piece though. Its very good.

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ahollowvoice [2006-09-27 01:18:20 +0000 UTC]

Lovely poem, though quite depressing, but that was the aim of it, broken-hearted and full of lament (i am relieved it wasn't autobiographical) lovely work.

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not-so-unaffected In reply to ahollowvoice [2006-09-27 02:09:28 +0000 UTC]

Thank you Brother.
I felt like I should add in that it didnt actually happen to me, because people have the tendancy to ask me that question.

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PhantomBoy [2006-09-26 08:37:57 +0000 UTC]

I really like this, it is so full of emotion and well written, and I agree with you for some reason this does strike me as being romantic in nature, bravo.

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not-so-unaffected In reply to PhantomBoy [2006-09-26 11:23:56 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for the compliments, and for the fave as well
*glows with pride*

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tyraen [2006-09-26 04:15:39 +0000 UTC]

That is what friends are for! Grammar and spelling nazis! Nazi love...

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not-so-unaffected In reply to tyraen [2006-09-26 11:28:21 +0000 UTC]

Nazi love.
Watch out there luff I am part German
And tank yew for the comment :B

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tyraen In reply to not-so-unaffected [2006-09-26 13:13:49 +0000 UTC]

Grammar and spelling nazis have nothing to do with Germans. I would never make fun of that. I think they are disgusting. :hugs:

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not-so-unaffected In reply to tyraen [2006-09-26 21:23:22 +0000 UTC]

ok ok I believe you

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spiker17 [2006-09-25 18:54:47 +0000 UTC]

18th line - should be 'believing', I think you have an extra 'e'.

It's really good, Jami.

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not-so-unaffected In reply to spiker17 [2006-09-26 00:02:27 +0000 UTC]

I never notice spelling mistakes
Thanks a lot Caiti

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MoonlitWitch [2006-09-25 14:48:58 +0000 UTC]

Ladybug....on the 3rd line, you forgot the T in hearts..otherwise, this is very good. Sad....but good!!!

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not-so-unaffected In reply to MoonlitWitch [2006-09-26 00:04:26 +0000 UTC]

MommaBug That is two spelling mistakes
Thank you for telling me, and for the comment as well

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MoonlitWitch In reply to not-so-unaffected [2006-09-26 02:44:56 +0000 UTC]

2? where was the other? I didn't catch it if there was another one...lol.
You're welcome..and you're welcome!!

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not-so-unaffected In reply to MoonlitWitch [2006-09-26 02:55:01 +0000 UTC]

Im not sure..oh yeah..spiker said there was one on beautifully

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MoonlitWitch In reply to not-so-unaffected [2006-09-26 03:12:17 +0000 UTC]

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