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Starisia [2012-07-13 07:32:33 +0000 UTC]
This is very nicely done. Short and bitter-sweet, and I like it quite a bit... one little thing though; you may want to pay a bit more attention to the tense. You switched from past and present tense a few times, and that kind of interrupted the flow. I still really like it though, and that's just one little thing I noticed and thought I'd point out ^_^ Thanks for writing!
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Starisia In reply to pakupakutego [2012-07-13 14:26:32 +0000 UTC]
No prob ^_^ Yeah, I know exactly what you mean. Same thing happens to me from time to time. Best thing to do is read back over what you have and editing before posting-not fun if you're like me and hate re-reading your own work. It really pays of though.
It was nothing ^_^ I hope it helps.
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pakupakutego In reply to Starisia [2012-07-14 11:23:18 +0000 UTC]
i am not really fond of rereading my own work because i get embarrassed... >///<
thank you for the advice though... I'll reread some of my stories, and hope to keep the blush off my face
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Starisia In reply to pakupakutego [2012-07-15 06:47:51 +0000 UTC]
Trust me, I know exactly what you mean DX Reading my own work is one of the few things I hate. I always get so embarrassed, no matter how often i do it.
Lol, it was nothing ^_^ Good luck!
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pakupakutego In reply to Starisia [2012-07-15 08:10:15 +0000 UTC]
thanks, i need all the luck i can get ...
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Starisia In reply to pakupakutego [2012-07-16 03:29:43 +0000 UTC]
Haha, I know the feeling... I remember it a little too well for my liking...
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