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SirWriter [2016-06-14 22:14:40 +0000 UTC]
Nice part five.
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Pharaoh-Hamenthotep In reply to SirWriter [2016-06-14 22:55:02 +0000 UTC]
I was a bit worried about the ending..
*is sometimes too evil*
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SirWriter In reply to Pharaoh-Hamenthotep [2016-06-14 23:23:50 +0000 UTC]
It's nothing permanent, but you didn't explain why our protagonist never noticed anything out of the ordinary the first time he was a mannequin.
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Pharaoh-Hamenthotep In reply to SirWriter [2016-06-14 23:31:09 +0000 UTC]
It was the overuse of the pleasurable setting.. He was off in his happy place and didn't notice how much time had passed.. When he changed back to normal all he could think about was becoming a mannequin again.. It was all there in part three..
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SirWriter In reply to Pharaoh-Hamenthotep [2016-06-15 13:14:38 +0000 UTC]
I must have missed it the first time around. I get it now, and feel like a moron.
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dkfenger [2016-06-14 22:13:13 +0000 UTC]
I spy an update... Looks like a couple of someones were just a bit too slow on the uptake. What a fate...
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daynar [2016-06-13 02:21:11 +0000 UTC]
Great work.
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HalpMi [2016-06-12 00:24:11 +0000 UTC]
Honestly it was kinda cool but the message was a bit too clear, and can you try to do the transformations? I really want to see them :3
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dkfenger In reply to Pharaoh-Hamenthotep [2016-06-14 22:11:02 +0000 UTC]
And it doesn't work for the Venn Machines anyway. Their transformations are instant.
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dkfenger In reply to Pharaoh-Hamenthotep [2016-06-15 23:15:54 +0000 UTC]
That sort of TF is the most work, it seems... but when done right, it looks amazing. I've never gotten very far with 3D programs, I don't think I quite have the right mindset for it.
(I'll admit to spending way too long playing with the various body-shape sliders in there.com and Second Life, though...)
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dkfenger In reply to Pharaoh-Hamenthotep [2016-06-17 20:42:18 +0000 UTC]
I can see how the mindsets would jump from the one to the other, though. I've heard of Blender, and poked at it a little... only to realize that it required more patience than I was willing to give it. This was long ago, and I'm sure it's better now.
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dkfenger In reply to Pharaoh-Hamenthotep [2016-06-18 00:19:29 +0000 UTC]
I've worked with table saws and band saws before. The latter not for a very very long time, mind. More recently, I've written firmware for 5-axis CNC mills. Now those guys can be fun. Watching a ton of steel accelerate at 15m/s^2 is fun... if you're not in its way.
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Pharaoh-Hamenthotep In reply to HalpMi [2016-06-16 11:03:44 +0000 UTC]
Make each part separate? Add joints where the body should move?
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dkfenger [2016-06-09 23:58:42 +0000 UTC]
Oh dear, this is getting to be something of a muddle. I hope he doesn't fall too far to the evil side...
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dkfenger In reply to Pharaoh-Hamenthotep [2016-06-13 22:35:08 +0000 UTC]
Ah well. I'm a patient sort. (Kind of have to be, writing at the pace I do. )
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dkfenger In reply to Pharaoh-Hamenthotep [2016-06-15 23:12:50 +0000 UTC]
That it was easier to make, or that you'd had some practice with the concepts in the other story? The sets are certainly simpler here, but given the depth of changes the characters go through, it works, keeping the focus on them.
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Pharaoh-Hamenthotep In reply to dkfenger [2016-06-16 11:01:41 +0000 UTC]
This one just seemed easier.. Writing it was easier, it didn't seem like such hard work. I really have to push myself to make progress on the other one, and I have no idea why :S
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dkfenger In reply to Pharaoh-Hamenthotep [2016-06-17 20:41:18 +0000 UTC]
Weird. I have stories that get like that sometimes. Sometimes they just get left to languish. A few I've managed to break through and progress on. Usually I find the stall is because I'm trying to do something that the characters don't "want" to do.
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dkfenger In reply to Pharaoh-Hamenthotep [2016-06-18 00:18:09 +0000 UTC]
Sometimes it's worth poking at the characters to see what they want to do. Figure out what their strengths and flaws are, and what they're looking to achieve, and it may loosen things up a little to find the new direction the story needs.
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dkfenger In reply to Pharaoh-Hamenthotep [2016-06-22 13:24:04 +0000 UTC]
Random images as story prompts... sounds like fun. Knowing to run with whatever's working is half the battle. Some of my best stories have come from snippets of dreams that got expanded out to have an actual plot.
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