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Published: 2011-12-20 13:24:10 +0000 UTC; Views: 1966; Favourites: 88; Downloads: 9
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Description I have abandoned battle, savored peace
and lost my weapons deep in sacred ground.
I have sought sweet mercy - God's own release
and prayed for his swift justice to abound.
I have walked past the soldiers in the street
and heard their cries run shameless without sound -
the tired, shuffling resonance of feet.
And in the morning's chilled and angry blast,
I recognize the music of retreat
as if I saw the ghosts that knew my past
gathering at the tables for a feast.
Then God allow these thoughts to be my last
for I have hopes my blessings will increase
and the darkΒ Β symphony of war will cease.
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Poetrymann In reply to ??? [2012-12-23 05:51:10 +0000 UTC]

Many thanks - I appreciate it very much!

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pomohippie7 [2012-03-06 20:37:25 +0000 UTC]

Your work has been showcased here! [link]

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Poetrymann In reply to pomohippie7 [2012-03-15 19:52:08 +0000 UTC]

Many thanks!

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TheOrderOfNightmare [2012-03-05 04:56:57 +0000 UTC]

This is some deep stuff...I like it! You are very good at expressing emotions!

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Poetrymann In reply to TheOrderOfNightmare [2012-03-07 23:27:35 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much - I appreciate it.

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malikvamp [2012-03-01 06:26:07 +0000 UTC]

Very Coll

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Poetrymann In reply to malikvamp [2012-03-02 00:50:19 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much. I appreciate it!

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malikvamp In reply to malikvamp [2012-03-01 06:26:15 +0000 UTC]

Cool*

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WaKip [2012-02-29 23:23:26 +0000 UTC]

The rhymes were a bit rough, but I like it

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Poetrymann In reply to WaKip [2012-03-02 00:49:08 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much. I appreciate it!

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CJWilde [2012-02-27 10:57:56 +0000 UTC]

This is a beautiful and moving piece. Keep up the good work.

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Poetrymann In reply to CJWilde [2012-03-02 00:45:23 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much. I appreciate it!

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SamGuentherArt [2012-02-22 03:48:02 +0000 UTC]

This is great! I love robert frost

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Poetrymann In reply to SamGuentherArt [2012-03-02 00:44:18 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much. I appreciate it!

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SamGuentherArt In reply to Poetrymann [2012-03-02 00:59:17 +0000 UTC]

Yep

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black-stray-wolf [2012-02-18 01:49:34 +0000 UTC]

Its been awhile since I have been able to read your works
And I still never cease to be amazed by what I read.
Please keep writing and your photographs too, they
make my day better each time.

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Poetrymann In reply to black-stray-wolf [2012-03-02 00:41:25 +0000 UTC]

That is very nice of you to say. Thanks!

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LeoDC2 [2012-02-16 07:49:34 +0000 UTC]

A Good way to look at the portrayal of war.

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Poetrymann In reply to LeoDC2 [2012-02-29 23:35:35 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much - I appreciate it!

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MariaTala [2012-01-19 13:16:03 +0000 UTC]

I think I have never told you enough how much I just adore your poetry.

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Poetrymann In reply to MariaTala [2012-01-23 23:34:55 +0000 UTC]

That is incredibly nice of you to say. Many thanks!

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icedoll101 [2012-01-19 03:31:48 +0000 UTC]

Nice!! This is awesome!!

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Poetrymann In reply to icedoll101 [2012-01-20 14:20:48 +0000 UTC]

Many thanks - I appreciate that!

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icedoll101 In reply to Poetrymann [2012-01-20 22:43:42 +0000 UTC]

Np.

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Mordial33 [2012-01-07 15:53:01 +0000 UTC]

It DOES sound like Robert Frost. (One of my favorite poems by him is called "October". If you have not heard of it, check it out.) This is an awesome poem!

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Poetrymann In reply to Mordial33 [2012-01-11 22:05:42 +0000 UTC]

Many thanks! I am familiar with it - he is an amazing poet.

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Mordial33 In reply to Poetrymann [2012-01-12 02:31:22 +0000 UTC]

That's good. And many people think that as well. Me included. (Obviously!)

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PeacefulSoul [2012-01-07 09:13:20 +0000 UTC]

Whoa! Let me tell you, coming from a master of rhyme himself, I have to admit,
you make for a great rhymester, my friend! It might be a Terza Rima,
but I counted the lines (14) and both end-lines rhyme (like Terza Rima's do).
It's like a Terza Rima Sonnet! I love this and you do such a fine job, always.

I would like to sometime Feature this in the Group.



Siryan

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Poetrymann In reply to PeacefulSoul [2012-01-11 22:05:18 +0000 UTC]

Many thanks. i just wish I had finished the challenge. I never got to some of them. The holidays sort of collided with the project.

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PeacefulSoul In reply to Poetrymann [2012-01-12 16:12:05 +0000 UTC]

That's a bummer you couldn't finish the challenge,
but when you say challenge, was this supposed to be
a contest or, a self-challenge for yourself?

Either way, it's good practice and came out great!

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peterdawes [2012-01-03 18:02:59 +0000 UTC]

robert frost... arguably one of my favorite poets. this is a very fitting tribute. well done.

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Poetrymann In reply to peterdawes [2012-01-05 16:00:53 +0000 UTC]

Many thanks, my friend - and Happy 2012.

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peterdawes In reply to Poetrymann [2012-01-09 17:27:24 +0000 UTC]

much the same to you!

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blossomingstarlight [2012-01-03 01:35:43 +0000 UTC]

I'm not always too fond of rhyme schemes because some poets tend to blindly snatch words out of a rhyming dictionary, but your use of rhyme here is stunning- each line has a purpose and that purpose isn't just to 'keep up the rhyme scheme'. Good work

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Poetrymann In reply to blossomingstarlight [2012-01-05 16:00:13 +0000 UTC]

That is why rhyme is so hard to do well...and why I often employ "off-rhyme". Thanks - I am glad you liked it.

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00niesje00 [2012-01-02 18:18:26 +0000 UTC]

beautiful... just beautiful <3

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Poetrymann In reply to 00niesje00 [2012-01-03 17:43:47 +0000 UTC]

I am very glad you enjoyed it - many thanks. Happy 2012!

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00niesje00 In reply to Poetrymann [2012-01-05 12:52:42 +0000 UTC]

^^ ur welcome, u too !<3

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sayraparker [2012-01-01 22:11:02 +0000 UTC]

I was captivated while reading. I could picture it in my mind. Amazing.

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Poetrymann In reply to sayraparker [2012-01-03 17:43:27 +0000 UTC]

I am very glad you enjoyed it - many thanks. Happy 2012!

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Oceanriver [2012-01-01 19:09:09 +0000 UTC]

this is amazing!

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Poetrymann In reply to Oceanriver [2012-01-03 17:43:21 +0000 UTC]

I am very glad you enjoyed it - many thanks. Happy 2012!

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Oceanriver In reply to Poetrymann [2012-01-03 20:22:40 +0000 UTC]

your welcome! happy 2012 to you too!

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TheMagicianLord [2012-01-01 18:51:12 +0000 UTC]

Wonderful work! The words flow really well, and I enjoyed reading it!

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Poetrymann In reply to TheMagicianLord [2012-01-03 17:43:15 +0000 UTC]

I am very glad you enjoyed it - many thanks. Happy 2012!

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TheMagicianLord In reply to Poetrymann [2012-01-03 17:55:05 +0000 UTC]

Happy new year to you too! ^^

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PlumNutz [2011-12-30 05:36:31 +0000 UTC]

This was felt.

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Poetrymann In reply to PlumNutz [2011-12-30 21:43:56 +0000 UTC]

Many thanks! That is very appreciated!

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Villenueve [2011-12-24 14:45:06 +0000 UTC]

Superbly written dearest Brendan!

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Poetrymann In reply to Villenueve [2012-01-03 17:39:32 +0000 UTC]

Many thanks!

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