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Description i know not where
to begin. the stares
are careless, the stars
couldn't care less,
and the world won't wait
(to spin),
while i catch my breath.

there is no space
in air to take the sky
for a ride in the water,
but i am still
enthralled by
opportunities afforded -
rapt
at each strange path
to be progressed.

we write backward ways
to overlay our inky feet,
these prints too deep to keep
receipt of old transgression.
of misplaced blessings.
of miracles abandoned,
now blooming
on the vine.

you are wrapped around
a finger of flowers
and colour speaks louder,
but by nature
every gesture
of your ghost-shape
is divine.
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Comments: 47

TwistedAlyx [2009-10-20 16:44:58 +0000 UTC]

Nice.

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prairiedaisy In reply to TwistedAlyx [2009-11-01 21:48:55 +0000 UTC]

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TwistedAlyx In reply to prairiedaisy [2009-11-02 04:17:21 +0000 UTC]

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y0urstalker [2009-08-31 07:08:05 +0000 UTC]

I've memorized all but the last stanza

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y0urstalker [2009-08-31 07:07:39 +0000 UTC]

you have no idea how in love with this poem I am

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prairiedaisy In reply to y0urstalker [2009-09-01 21:13:51 +0000 UTC]

i'm glad you do. good to have you back!

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y0urstalker [2009-06-01 12:43:04 +0000 UTC]

I am rereading this for the gazillionth time

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prairiedaisy In reply to y0urstalker [2009-06-01 17:16:57 +0000 UTC]

i miss you.

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TheBloodWriter [2009-05-21 19:26:06 +0000 UTC]

Excellent, final stanza especially, extra-especially the bit about twining.

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prairiedaisy In reply to TheBloodWriter [2009-05-22 22:29:39 +0000 UTC]

Thank you most kindly from both of us

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Panda-Vision [2009-05-19 23:28:36 +0000 UTC]

the stares
are careless, the stars
couldn't care less

Your playful phonetics are always brilliant
Also as a whole, there seems to be a good balance between just showing and explicitly telling. Another great collaboration guys.

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prairiedaisy In reply to Panda-Vision [2009-05-22 22:31:16 +0000 UTC]

Thank you most kindly - that was actually Shane playing off my words. He has a way of doing that.

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Hyetthramine [2009-05-09 18:32:02 +0000 UTC]

this is absolutely beautiful! one of Shane's best collabs, and, from a quick perusal of you gallery, I can see why.

good job

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prairiedaisy In reply to Hyetthramine [2009-05-17 15:03:07 +0000 UTC]

thanks a lot!

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ChibiChi916 [2009-04-23 02:31:24 +0000 UTC]

Breathtaking!

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prairiedaisy In reply to ChibiChi916 [2009-04-24 00:08:00 +0000 UTC]

thank you most kindly.

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FollowMeBackHome [2009-04-22 17:34:56 +0000 UTC]

the beginning >

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prairiedaisy In reply to FollowMeBackHome [2009-04-24 00:08:08 +0000 UTC]

you >

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Amertie [2009-04-22 02:58:15 +0000 UTC]

the two of you are magical.

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prairiedaisy In reply to Amertie [2009-04-24 00:09:40 +0000 UTC]

you're not so unmagical yourself, lady.

i miss you!

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Amertie In reply to prairiedaisy [2009-04-24 00:10:10 +0000 UTC]

if you say so.

i miss you too.

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prairiedaisy In reply to Amertie [2009-04-24 00:23:27 +0000 UTC]

why yes i do.

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Amertie In reply to prairiedaisy [2009-05-03 17:02:35 +0000 UTC]

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That-Hippie-Kid [2009-04-22 02:42:52 +0000 UTC]

you guys are fantastic together. well done.
<3

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prairiedaisy In reply to That-Hippie-Kid [2009-04-24 00:10:00 +0000 UTC]

thank you most kindly.

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leyghan [2009-04-22 01:02:52 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful words.

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prairiedaisy In reply to leyghan [2009-04-24 00:10:06 +0000 UTC]

thank you.

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gliitchlord [2009-04-21 20:25:41 +0000 UTC]

I was wondering when this was going to happen.

Fantastic collaboration.

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prairiedaisy In reply to gliitchlord [2009-04-21 21:01:35 +0000 UTC]

you are too kind, Charles.

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YouInventedMe [2009-04-21 20:22:10 +0000 UTC]

wonderful writing with you.

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prairiedaisy In reply to YouInventedMe [2009-04-21 21:01:17 +0000 UTC]

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PlatoPushpin [2009-04-21 20:18:35 +0000 UTC]

You guys are huge together.

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prairiedaisy In reply to PlatoPushpin [2009-04-21 21:01:50 +0000 UTC]

thanks, darling. i'm glad you think so.

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IAmPhoenixMoth [2009-04-21 18:40:01 +0000 UTC]

I absolutely love the rhythm and the language of this.
You guys worked REALLY well together; your styles flowed so well I actually can't spot who's who.

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prairiedaisy In reply to IAmPhoenixMoth [2009-04-21 21:02:26 +0000 UTC]

the right chemistry, I guess. not to mention Shane's megatalented.

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IAmPhoenixMoth In reply to prairiedaisy [2009-04-21 21:42:44 +0000 UTC]

INDEED.

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anyimacielgray [2009-04-21 17:46:19 +0000 UTC]

you two are fabulous together

<3

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prairiedaisy In reply to anyimacielgray [2009-04-21 21:02:38 +0000 UTC]

thank youuuu my darling.

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anyimacielgray In reply to prairiedaisy [2009-04-22 02:10:52 +0000 UTC]

forever welcome <3

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thornsandpaper [2009-04-21 17:11:33 +0000 UTC]

this is so amazing.

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prairiedaisy In reply to thornsandpaper [2009-04-21 21:02:46 +0000 UTC]

thank you.

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platinummyr [2009-04-21 16:26:59 +0000 UTC]

Pretty. I absolutely LOVE the rhyming

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prairiedaisy In reply to platinummyr [2009-04-21 21:02:55 +0000 UTC]

thank you glad you do.

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tigerpusen05 [2009-04-21 15:31:05 +0000 UTC]

Fantastic.
It's absolutely gorgeous.

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prairiedaisy In reply to tigerpusen05 [2009-04-21 21:03:01 +0000 UTC]

thanks heaps!

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Katchzen [2009-04-21 15:13:08 +0000 UTC]

Wow. You two write really well together. I can't tell which of you wrote which lines, so seamlessly your voices combined.

"And the world won't wait to spin while I catch my breath."

I love how you've taken such an over-used idea and turned it into something new and interesting. It's my favourite line. ^^

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prairiedaisy In reply to Katchzen [2009-04-21 21:03:17 +0000 UTC]

That was all Shane. I'm glad you enjoyed this

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