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Published: 2011-12-05 06:28:08 +0000 UTC; Views: 212; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 3
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Description Be they ignorant, savvy, vain or wise,
There is something more than meets the eyes.
There is more perception beyond first glance
But you must choose to take the chance.

Be they ignorant, savvy, vain or wise,
It is what we perceive them to be.
Not all have the insight to see
There is something more than meets the eyes.

There is more perception beyond first glance
So let's not judge what cannot be seen.
Wisdom goes the distance to find that thing
But we must choose to take the chance.

There is something more than meets the eyes
But we must choose to take the chance.
Be they ignorant, savvy, vain or wise,
There is more perception beyond first glance.

It is not too far for us to see.
Just look deeper.
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Comments: 8

psycho-ferret-killer [2012-01-05 00:29:14 +0000 UTC]

I really love the use of repetition in this piece that emphasises the beautiful point that you are making. I think that this sort of message is deeply necesary in these times where perceptions tend to be wrong and unreasonable. I think that its even sadder that some people try so hard to create false images of themselves when who they really are is so much better than that. The ending is just perfect as well. Short and sweet, the way it should be

A lovely, touching and well written piece well done! xxx

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ProfessorPhenom In reply to psycho-ferret-killer [2012-01-11 06:25:43 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much. You kind of hit it dead on the head. Repetition just drills the point in. It tends to be annoying at times but I can't deny its effectiveness. I also appreciate you adding it to your favorites. Thank you, thank you, thank you. xx

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psycho-ferret-killer In reply to ProfessorPhenom [2012-01-11 10:24:13 +0000 UTC]

awww you're very welcome! Im sorry its taken me so long to get around to it, but u know I love all ur work xxx

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3wyl [2011-12-19 13:09:53 +0000 UTC]

I like the rhyming and rhythm of this piece. The way you've repeated things is pretty awesome... adds further emphasis to it all, I find.

I can see you trying to fit this into a specific poetry form, I think? I'm not sure if it works fully... but it does feel as if you've focused on a lot on how to carry this out, if that makes sense?

I like the way you keep on about the concept, though that may be seen as a bad thing as well with no variety, or not as much, anyway.

It's awesome how you go in a circle, in a way. I suppose that could be like life. The two lines at the bottom make a potent message and I think... that you've really channelled your intent expressed through the poem here.

That's just how I see it, anyway. Interesting stuff.

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ProfessorPhenom In reply to 3wyl [2012-01-11 06:32:27 +0000 UTC]

Well I wasn't very familiar with the style but I'm glad my effort could be seen. Sorry it took me so long to respond to this, I find that I'm not on as much as I used to be but I wanted to say something about everyone assuming they know a person just by looking at them. It takes time to get to understand a person. You know? No matter how much you think you know there is always a bit more to the picture.

Nevertheless, thank you so much for your comment.

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3wyl In reply to ProfessorPhenom [2012-01-11 20:50:06 +0000 UTC]

Nah, it's alright!

Oh, definitely. I know what you mean. Sometimes it can take a very long time indeed. =/

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led-sabbath [2011-12-05 19:56:13 +0000 UTC]

I have just looked deeper. I really like this as it is written truth.

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ProfessorPhenom In reply to led-sabbath [2011-12-12 04:44:31 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much. It's not a style of written poetry I'm very used to but it's nice to know that someone likes it. I'm very honored. Thanks again.

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