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Too Late
Published: 2006-12-31 23:02:48 +0000 UTC; Views: 7270; Favourites: 158; Downloads: 72
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It's too late, buddy. Your attempts at appeasementon this post-fuck armchair have long since lost their strength.
It's too late for sweet words and oh-so-fucking soft kisses -
too late for you to try to win this oh-so-dirty fight.
You thought you'd won -
I thought you'd won.
We both saw predator and prey and knew which we were,
and I was falling for your flights of fancy, succumbing
to your every sensual desire, seeing situations
where I was yours completely; I saw myself fading.
I was your possession, not even a person, a plaything.
My cunt was a cup from which you supped at will
and hid in a cupboard when you had visitors, ashamed.
You were not expecting my ascension. I spent so long
trying to please you here -
on my back, as I was used by you
for every sordid fucking pleasure which caught your whim -
You were not expecting your toy, your breathing doll
to speak, to have a mind. I caught you off-guard.
It's too late, buddy. Your pussy-on-demand has a voice
and it has teeth -
and the next time you dare to come near
it will bite.
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Comments: 78
Thank you so much for your kind words.
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Your very welcome. Lol... I'm missing half my left thumb from an incident with a table saw. I always tell young fellas when they ask me how I lost I that I ran across a girl with teeth in her pussy. They always get this look on their face. The end of your poem made me giggle
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Fav'ed, because I love it.
But there is something about the lines:
"and it has teeth -
and the next time you dare to come near
it will bite."
that I just do not like. It jus tmakes me think of the over-used meme Toothy Vagina. I was thinking something along the lines of:
And it has power
and the next time you dare to come near
But that doesn't work, I don't know, it's just them lines, the rest is so hard to critique it's unbelievable. Beautiful work.
It will weild it.
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I was kind of thinking of the vagina dentata myth at the time.
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Holy fuck. This is so powerful. I love this, it pretty much sums up how I felt when I got out of my abusive relationship. This is so so amazing.
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Wow, that's...almost scary. I wouldn't want to be whoever the narrator is mad at, I really wouldn't. Well done, love your word choices, usually Im not the one for a lot of vulgar vocabulary because I think there are better ways to show anger and other emotions, but this is so right and it fits and works so well. Congrats on the DD!
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there is so much pride in the voice, it's great.
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Yikes, lol. Your icon is such a stark contrast.
A very barbed wake-up call. It captures how we cut up our abusers in our minds (and in reality as well).
Reminds me a little of a film called "Hard Candy" with Ellen Page, in a VERY different role from her better-known recent hit.
This piece has that same "unexpected knife in the gut" feeling it produces. I suppose especially because I'm male (though I'm not in the habit of abusive relationships).
"Hell hath no fury..."
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Very direct feeling, kudos, but I wouldn't go as far as ThornyEnglishRose's comments.
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Oooh, have you found angrier poetry? I'd love to see it. I love emotional writing.
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I normaly never read the lit here on DA nor do I ever favorite them..... This should tell you how much I love this. I've been there. Done that and bitten back. Never let anyone tell you that you should do otherwise.
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Well written. Now I have a toothed-vagina phobia, though.
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Haha, never heard of vagina dentata ...?
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ahaha, the great equalizer! 
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Oh, the hate!
It's so tangible. Gives me chills...
fantastic piece
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Amazing.
I love this. It's so angry. The emotions that exploded for being bottled up inside for so long are clear and over-spilling with greatness. A DD well deserved!
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Wow, amazingly written.
I especially love the last sentences towards the end.
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Very nice. The only thing that popped out at me that I didn't like was the "pussy-on-demand" line. After the use of the much more pejorative "cunt," "pussy" seemed more like a weak attempt at being blunt, even if it would have been effective on its own. I would change it to something less offensive, so it doesn't seem so much like you tried and fell short, or find an even stronger word. Other than that, great job, though!
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I love the courage and the strength to stand up against being used as an object. This is very powerful, and definitely earns my sympathy for those enduring the superficiality of others towards women as a tool for sex.
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I adore this.
The structure is beautiful, the word choice is so blunt and descriptive... just wow.
I don't post my poetry, but I do write.
I wish I could write like this.
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Wow... This left me speechless. I can't even begin to describe the emotions that it inspired in me. All I can say is that the anger is tangible, and realistic, and of course, the situation sad. You did a great job writing this.
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Very very good! It really gets the message across and does so in an interesting way! Yay, good writing!
nnnnnn... wow. too many exclaimation points.
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Angriest?
...hardly
Though an effective peice I will admit; I wouldn't put it above the rest of the poets on DA who have written much angrier peices about similiar occurances
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FAQ #873: What do I do when I disapprove of a Daily Deviation feature? : "If you have a problem with a particular Daily Deviation feature, do NOT leave your disapproval among the other comments on the piece. It is disrespectful to both the artist featured, and the Gallery Director who chose it."
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dissapproval? No my dissapproval was of the description provided in the Daily Deviation, not the piece itself
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I don't see what business you have disapproving of my description. Keywords: quite possibly and I. And so it is, quite possibly the angriest piece I have found. I never said it was the angriest piece on dA, and - I would have thought this was implicit, but clearly not - I don't expect anyone to agree with me.
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I have every right to complain when you use a word such as angriest. It unfairly establishes a standard which cuts out the other numerous DA poets who have posted much, much more angrier pieces. Now this doesn't make their works "better" in any way, but they are angrier none the less.
Saying that this peice is "quite possibly the angriest piece" shows that you don't really browse the poetry section in DA enough, because if you did I'm sure you'd come to know a few angry writers that would make your head spin in a different direction.
Had you use words like "this is an angry poem" or "this is an angrier poem" I wouldn't have said anything, but "angriest"...nay
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Never mind that it's a subjective comment - suggesting a DD is a good thing to do. I do not deserve to be criticised for it.
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I was never criticising that, only the description provided
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Explaining what you like about the piece is part of the process of suggesting a DD. I'm sorry you feel that my compliment of your work deserves to be criticised.
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I don't think it does at all, and your compliment made me squee muchly... I just didn't want to devolve into an argument with the 'critic' here in the deviation comments.
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wow this really speaks to me, been there done that
faves!
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wow, this is amazing work, left me speechless, congratz for DD! It is definetly worth it!
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... Sweet! It had a weird and cool flow to it that I couldn't pinpoint, and it just made the poem cooler!
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P.O.'ed poetry equals 
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Power and rage conveyed through simplicity.
Nicely done
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Well, I like it. You've conveyed anger; and warning. I also understand your repitition (the alliteration in your second stanza is fun when read out loud) of 'fucking', but I'm not so sure that it adds anything, or if it's only there for the word's own boldness.
I think I'd like to check out your other work now.
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YOU SHOW HIM!
I can't think of anything you could do to make this piece any better than it already is. Awesome work!
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